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    dots Submission Name: Plastic-Wrapped Nuclear Goddots
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    Author: srcastic1
    ASL Info:    18/F/IA
    Elite Ratio:    6.29 - 96/97/28
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 543
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    Bytes: 745



    Description:
       ok, so this is a bit controversial, just to warn. But it's not against individual spirituality. It's against the corruption and ability of man to take a divine story and twist and destroy until everyone forgets that the process is the opposite of the general word of love for one another it was originally attempting to promote. Let me know how to improve the flow.


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    dotsPlastic-Wrapped Nuclear Goddots
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    I thank group gospel, multihandedly
    igniting private fires of life
    while fueling the war torches
    to extinguish millions for sin.
    I pity the God who may take in shamed
    as man desecrates, incinerates
    and the blood reigns from the ground, floods
    for the love of him.
    As story becomes book becomes law
    anti-Christ dies crucified,
    brilliant mind turned from law against "God".
    This novelty God is synthetic as any
    creation of the creatures It created.
    For the zealous fanatical git
    it comes with literal print
    to slant, corrupt, and rip:
    wisdom-defacing hatred,
    law to block divinity,
    and truth-killing stupidity.




    Submitted on 2005-12-21 01:30:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A very clear picture here of what the world has actually done to God, and his image, regardless of your religion.
    I am a believer, and this did not offend me for I could see from the description your intent. I know the scenes you portray are true and accurately place the world in His sites.
    To most, God is synthetic, and not real, just a slot machine they spin hoping for a payout.
    Truely, Christ has been replaced with an X!
    Unimportant unless He is usefull in trying to force an opinion on others. You cannot tell others to believe, but others are allowed to preach disbelief, where is the equality?
    Very good write here, I made me realize just where "I" need to be in regards to the coming days ahead.
    Now, may you have a very happy and very very Merry Christmas this year!
    LATER
    | Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]
      Thought provoking. I was lost quite a few times. You use words that are somewhat uncommon. Common to you and your natives perhaps. Hehehehe!!! From Africa by the way, so excuse me.

    The words are however very appropriate to the theme. I like the idea that you toy around with. How we humans have totally corrupted what was intended to be pure and honest. Truth. Like if we take Christmas. Christ is so not part of this any more. It's all about how to make people spend more money. It's about presents and Christmas trees and this and that. All good and well. But what about the gift that is Jesus...

    I'm sorry. See what you have made me do??? Hehehehe!! Great job.

    Blessed Christmas.
    | Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by K | [ Reply to This ]


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