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    dots Submission Name: Powerdots
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    Author: my shadow
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 291/150/48
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 758
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    Description:
       Power grows through the barrel of a gun is a quote from communist Mao. Most of the poem is an exploration of that thought. Power has to do with violent revolution on one hand and the alternative we have on another. Once power is under the gun, the people lose their rights. That idea is counterpoised by the beliefs of Christianity that have done much for the route to our freedoms today. The line about turning the other cheek is from Jesus (Matthew 5.39). The line about the world inheriting the meek (as thought by the dictatorial) comes from the bible (Matthew 5.5). The line is actually The meek shall inherit the world. It refers to passive resistance in the face of power. This brings us to the final lines which should be clearer to now understand. The communist idea is that there is nothing more than evolution, that the best possible world for humans is through communism and that must be attained by force. Thus we have the God/love and evolution/revolution question at the end. On a personal note, I am not a Christian or a Communist, just an observer. Big ideas controlled by a few over the many always leads to disaster for the many. More people today are willing to concede their freedoms, allowing government to take them in exchange for material things and care by the state.


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    Power grows through the barrel of a gun
    And you are in my sights.
    I have you now:
    You have no rights.
    You best refuse to fight;
    Just turn the other cheek,
    Because don't all the laws say,
    The world inherits the meek?
    Go whine and cry;
    Go twist and turn.
    About how life isn't fair
    Even though you give it all you have to learn.
    And is the question this:
    Is it God or is it evolution?
    Or is the question this:
    Is it love or is it revolution?








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      IT Is Love, Peace, Joy, Abundance, Beauty & Prosperous Healthy Smiles 2 Share ;-) ;-) ;--)

    I greATly apprecIATed this piece ;-)
    | Posted on 2011-08-12 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't full understand the question in the end, it rhymes easy enough. I think that the piece is interesting. But I do wonder what you mean by revolution I think that if you were to include more detail about this idea it would really really strengthen the piece. Just thoughts.
    It was a little dark action for my taste, but I do enjoy the opposition and the uniqueness.

    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2011-08-09 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      You took this from someone elses quote and used pure thought.Excellent.Barrel of the gun stands out to me artistically.Your power with this piece was that you grabbed the reader with questions internally at end.

    Is it God or is it evolution?

    Is it love or is it revolution?
    It was the cherry on top.

    I also like the fact that you kept the title simple instead of "Barrel of a gun".
    At the beginning I visualize someone poniting a gun at another person, discovering that they have this newfound power within modern weaponry.I am a firm believer that guns can change people.Nice diggs though.
    | Posted on 2010-07-20 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      Good tempo-rapid fire lines that match perfectly the message of the poem. Last line was GREAT!
    Also like the way you twisted "The meek shall inherit the earth". To me that is the sign of a good poem-saying things in a way that make the reader say"I never would would have said it that way but isn't it just the right way to say it?"

    ~Side of Keen~
    | Posted on 2005-12-27 00:00:00 | by Side of Keen | [ Reply to This ]
      Wooooo. Kind of freaky, but it really gets you-you know what I mean? Yeah, seriously dudey dude. I like it, but maybe it could flow a bit more? Im not sure
    | Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by nuttyginna | [ Reply to This ]


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