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    dots Submission Name: MY POETRYdots

    Author: L.L.COLLINS
    ASL Info:    25-ORLANDO, FL
    Elite Ratio:    4.57 - 172/147/36
    Words: 424
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMY POETRYdots

    My poetry is for you to listen and not read,
    donít miss the trees when I plant the seed.
    I steady my rhythm to the blowing breeze,
    my destiny is to shake your knees and still fulfill your needs.
    I say things to you I could never say any one else,
    please see these line as part of yourself..
    If you turn my pages and loose your breath,
    hold to the mirror images that brought you there.

    My poetry is for you to hate but not discriminate,
    understand I mean every word I say and I hope you take it that way.
    Open up the truth and come on out of the shade,
    my seriousness is endless with no time to play.
    With your eyes wide open I just canít lie to you,
    when I too have been confused, up, down, and through,
    my finger tips type the blues and tell the path of my shoes,
    so sometimes I realize, I hate me too.

    My poetry is for you to smile and cry at the same time,
    get lost in the thoughts you thought you wouldnít get off your mind.
    cry when you see the smiles you had left behind,
    smile when you cease the tears and finally dried your eyes.
    Let me rain you soaking wet with my agelong regrets,
    recollect the emptiness but believe I told you best,
    when no oneís listening you too can confess,
    the sunshine ainít so pretty unless you been through some mess.

    My poetry is for you to eat when your starving hungry,
    believe someone else knows your cold and your lonely.
    If your shivering or quivering with a smiling face,
    rewind my lines and remember your not the only.
    Bath yourself clean in my sweat, blood, and tears,
    win again when you listen in on my wonder years.
    Let me cuddle you with a lullaby for your heart breaks and fears,
    we can drift past your solitude til your not even here.

    My poetry is for you to make love to or make love through,
    let my praying hands reach out a book and touch you,
    let me whisper in your ear my lovesick groove,
    you donít have to call it sex unless you cum to.
    My poetry is for you to get high to,
    close your eyes and fly to.
    Give up and die to,
    get up and try to.
    My poetry is for you.

    Submitted on 2005-12-21 04:13:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Your poetry is so soulful...you seem to reach right down into it and pull out all of these beautiful words and beautiful lines that reach out and grab for emotion. You got me with this one, this is definetely one of my favorite writes that i've read by you. Well now i know what your poetry is for, but i still dont know anything about you...i hope you will intice me with your inner being soon...I'd love to get to know who you really are. And don't worry I'll listen...~Ashley~
    | Posted on 2006-11-06 00:00:00 | by redeemer | [ Reply to This ]
      I normally write my poetry because there is a line or two floating about in my head, and all of a sudden it becomes a rhyme and it just grows. When I am given a topic I tend to struggle a bit. I don't think I could say to you what my poems were for or about at all, but I don't think that that was really the point of this one. It's a lovely piece...again...welcome to my faves.
    Frann. x
    | Posted on 2006-10-06 00:00:00 | by Effee | [ Reply to This ]
      For me?

    *hears the rabbits singing happy unbirthday at the table for a tea party in Alice and Wonderland*


    This was deep! I liked the emotion that you put into this one. Poetry is something that usually I write more for myself though. It is a way for me to speak out loud without having to make a sound. ya know?

    This was wonderful. you have talent!

    | Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really deep...I read it over to make sure I didn't miss anything...each line set you up for the next perfectly. The feelings you showed here aren't always easy to portray. great write.
    keep writing double L.
    | Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      eeek... splendid! Poetry and expression is so important and you can feel so many different emotions simply by reading someone's words. Words are a powerful thing if used correctly... and i'm gonna have to say.. in this poem.. i felt some of that power.. hah.. (i sound so lame) but really.. i loved this... it is going in my favorites...

    -Keep it up!
    | Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by melancholystar | [ Reply to This ]
      I really loved reading this one
    I like how you deeply caught an emotion all of us have
    And created a beautiful feeling to this word
    This is not easy to do
    God Bless
    | Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      This one is very deep. You really have to slowly read the words to the depth. It makes you think of your own life and then you tend to drift back and forth. I found myself leaving your words a few different times... I was thinking about someone and incorporating your words... This write is way different and I glad that I got a chance to read it.

    | Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by mon28 | [ Reply to This ]
      I also love this. It honestly pulled me into each stanza and flowed with an almost rap like rhythm. It was a unique way to structure your stanza's and a unique topic. All in all it's a thumbs up for me

    | Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by dark-red-pain | [ Reply to This ]
      I absolutely love this. I'm new to this site and have read a few pieces that I enjoyed, but this piece is amazing. This brought me in, pulled up a chair for me, sat me down, gave me a massage, a drink, fellowship, communication. This almost gave the feeling of someone actually there, doing all these things. The point is, it makes one think, feel and sigh all at the same time. I love it, and I'm making this a favorite! I'll certainly be back to read more from you!

    | Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by SorrelsReality | [ Reply to This ]

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