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    dots Submission Name: Don'tdots
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    Author: prittee1
    ASL Info:    16/f/aus
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 13/21/6
    Words: 211
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 719
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1291



    Description:
       i wrote this poem about a guy that was chasing me for ages. i don't knoe why, but something about the way he acted around me made me think that he wasn't being genuines.. and that pissed me off, so i wrote a poem.
    they're the best outlet for cooped-up emotion!
    Enjoy!
    --->Elisa xoxo


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    dotsDon'tdots
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    Stop talking to me, stop pretending,
    Donít look at me with those eyes,
    I donít want to know,
    All I want is for you to justÖ

    Donít tell me youíll protect me,
    When you want to sound tough.
    Donít tell me you care,
    When you couldnít give a stuff.

    Donít tell me you agree,
    When you think different.
    Donít tell me thereís plenty of time,
    When our days have all been spent.

    Donít stay with me,
    When youíd rather be somewhere else.
    Donít tell me to have faith,
    When I donít even believe in myself.

    Donít lie to me,
    When you think the truth will hurt.
    Donít pretend your thoughts are pure,
    When your mind is full of dirt.

    Donít tell me I look nice,
    When you donít think I do.
    Donít tell me that thereís three or four,
    When thereís only two.

    Donít gaze at me like you admire,
    When you donít like the way I look.
    Donít tell me you donít understand,
    When I know you can read me like a book.

    But most of all donít tell me,
    When you say you wonít,
    That you love me with all your heart,
    When we both know you donít.





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      i like this! its long but i still like it! u put the point across in a easy way that i could understand and i didnt have to think about it! ya those poems where I can read and not think about wats going on but noe i li ke! haha! im lazy! goodjob!
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liked it... it was long... but good... u have a nice way of putting things across... and its just very clear. when u read one of ur poems u dont have to think too much... u just understand it... and that good. keep it up. hope to see more of ur work.
    | Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by submarine | [ Reply to This ]
      meh i liked the whole concept of it it was great but some of the ryming seems to be forced but anyways keep up the good work peace out
    | Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by setsuna | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed reading this, it's very well written and your choice of words flow very nicely. Its just the right length too - I think if it had been longer it would have lost the impact it has at the moment. Well done.
    | Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by Sugar | [ Reply to This ]


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