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    dots Submission Name: THE VOICEdots
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    Author: disturbedx1000
    ASL Info:    21/m/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 204/316/119
    Words: 390
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 227
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    Bytes: 2153



    Description:
       ok this is the prequill to DAMNNATION so if your wondering why this leaves you lingering on what the outcome is, just go to my page and read my fetured poem DAMNNATION to find out the ending.


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    dotsTHE VOICEdots
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    I am so afraid for I have taken a life,
    Why, why did you give me this knife?
    I must cover my action,
    Why did this bring me satisfaction?

    Listen you fool I’m not the one, who did it,
    So are you done now with your little fit?
    Just finish the job and do what I said,
    Why do you hesitate, are you afraid to be dead?

    No get away, shut up, and stay out of my mind,
    What are you, a demon, if so what kind?
    I want to get away and rejoice,
    Am I a sinner for listening to this voice?

    I am no demon but I am your voice,
    Why don’t you listen do you have another choice?
    No I thought not,
    Why do you fear getting caught?

    I just want you to leave me alone,
    Why do I want to bash my head with a stone?
    You, you’re doing this to me,
    Why wont you just leave me be?

    I can’t leave my boy; I’m trapped in here,
    Why do you attempt to stop me my dear?
    You know it’s useless to try,
    Again why are you afraid to die?

    This boy was just trying to take the knife,
    So why did you make me take his life?
    Now I’m hiding the body and the truth,
    Why is my heart rate not going through the roof?

    It’s because you like the feeling of what you did,
    Why do you care he’s just some kid?
    He took from you so you took something in return,
    What’s the matter, does it make your stomach churn?

    Shut up, shut up get out of my head,
    Can’t you see that I can’t until your dead?
    I’m in control now whether you want it to be or not,
    Why, why must I sit here and let this kid rot?
    Shut up and get me out of your dreamland boy,
    Why, why do you treat me like some dumb ass toy?
    You’re just a dream inside my head,
    Why won’t you just kill yourself like I said?

    Because I’m stronger than that I know I am,
    Do you think I really give a damn?
    I’m getting out of here one way or another,
    So why did you make me kill my brother?




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      i really dont know how to put this but this is the greatest thing i've ever read....im just in aw of wut to say...u really have a great talent....ur flow...and style is really great....im going to read some more...
    FEFE
    | Posted on 2006-01-15 00:00:00 | by darksweetness | [ Reply to This ]
      this is perfect, definitely prequel to DAMNATION. if you keep this up scientists will come to your house to poke and prod you until they find out what makes you so damn good.

    the poem in itself though is perfect because it can stand alone AND be the prequel at the same time, Kudos to you!

    Misty
    | Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by misty_of_moon | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh my God, he killed his brother! This is sad. And I think I actually like this one better, lol, not that the other one was good, but this one is just so, so, so deep! I love it! It was really original and nothing about it was unclear. It sounds to me as if this poor dude is on the brink of insanity, like he's lossing his mind. Sorta reminds me of a possession or the Exorcist for some reason, lol. I wouldn't change a thing, it was great. Every bit of it was great and I honestly can't find a damn thing wrong with it. It's a fav!
    | Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      This is extremely deep
    I had those same voices in My Head when i was an addict
    There are beatable
    Near the end of my addiction I used to laugh at there stupitity
    It is possible to Heal
    The secret is to simply stop using Drugs if that is what causes the voices
    Take Care
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]



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