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Author: nuttyginna
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This was written for a friend of mine that I really adore and love. He has now moved away, but we still keep in touch. What do you think?


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Say you'll stay with me
Through good and bad
Say you'll forgive me
When Ive been sad.
Say you wont leave me
When I need you most
Say you'll believe me
When ive seen a ghost.
Please promise me this
That when Im dead
Youll remember the good times
That weve both had.
Thanks for the groovin
And the happiness too
Just remeber this
I love you.




Submitted on 2005-12-21 12:13:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  um. i think clayton's right. check your spelling and grammar and i promise it will make your poem better! hehe. oh, thanks for commenting with my "prayer in disguise"! :)
| Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by eixia | [ Reply to This ]
  Say you'll stay with me
Through good and bad- rather
(When I'm good or sad)
Say you'll forgive me
When I've been sad.-rather
(Though I have been bad)


Say you wont leave me
When I need you most
Say you'll believe me
When I've seen a ghost.
(These are very cool)

Please promise me this
That when I'm dead--rather
(That when I am dead)
Youll remember the good times-
(You'll remember the times)
That weve both had.-
(When our hearts had bleed)

Thanks for the groovin
And the happiness too
Just remeber this-
(Just remember my words)
I love you.-
(I'll always love you)


And maybe another word other than groovin,
but hea its just your's, not mine.

A little work will clean up the lines and give it more swing.
A really good message, and everything a person might like to hear.
Like I said, it's yours, and it's original, do what feels good for you!
Advice is free, your love to write is priceless
| Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ]


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