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This was written for a friend of mine that I really adore and love. He has now moved away, but we still keep in touch. What do you think?
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Say you'll stay with me Through good and bad Say you'll forgive me When Ive been sad. Say you wont leave me When I need you most Say you'll believe me When ive seen a ghost. Please promise me this That when Im dead Youll remember the good times That weve both had. Thanks for the groovin And the happiness too Just remeber this I love you. |
Submitted on 2005-12-21 12:13:45 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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um. i think clayton's right. check your spelling and grammar and i promise it will make your poem better! hehe. oh, thanks for commenting with my "prayer in disguise"! :)| | Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by eixia | [ Reply to This ] | Say you'll stay with me | Through good and bad- rather (When I'm good or sad) Say you'll forgive me When I've been sad.-rather (Though I have been bad) Say you wont leave me When I need you most Say you'll believe me When I've seen a ghost. (These are very cool) Please promise me this That when I'm dead--rather (That when I am dead) Youll remember the good times- (You'll remember the times) That weve both had.- (When our hearts had bleed) Thanks for the groovin And the happiness too Just remeber this- (Just remember my words) I love you.- (I'll always love you) And maybe another word other than groovin, but hea its just your's, not mine. A little work will clean up the lines and give it more swing. A really good message, and everything a person might like to hear. Like I said, it's yours, and it's original, do what feels good for you! Advice is free, your love to write is priceless | Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by Clayton | [ Reply to This ] | |
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