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    dots Submission Name: United in Lovedots
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    Author: auntwheezie
    ASL Info:    45/Female/Dartmouth NS
    Elite Ratio:    4.37 - 75/57/18
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 191
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    dotsUnited in Lovedots
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    Come lay with me and hold me close.
    Let my fingers trace your form.
    Kissing where my fingers travelled
    Every inch of flesh to explore.
    Whisper softly what you need.
    Tell me when I please you.
    Kiss me with the hunger
    You lock away deep in your soul.
    Lay with me in sated bliss
    Watch the sunrise through the trees.
    Let me love you in the present
    And in all the years to be.
    Stay with me and grow old together
    While we tend our garden of love.




    Submitted on 2005-12-21 13:27:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I want to be in that relationship...I really felt how the person in this poem was feeling. Wanting that closeness forever..It was also a bit erotic which I think was a nice touch...
    | Posted on 2006-01-30 00:00:00 | by haileebobailee | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow..you just made me miss my boyfriend really bad! But I like it! I loved the first picture of just two people lying together holding each other close. I don't get to see my boyfriend very much because he's in the military..so the little stuff like that just tugs at my heart a little bit. This poem is exactly how it is when two lovers are together..I loved the emotion...great write. ~hailie~
    | Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
      beautifully written... i simply love... love... heh. I hope that this is true and that you have someone like this in your life that you can "grow old" with and always have. I look forward to the day when I can write something like this because of an experience of love. Great job.
    Brooke
    | Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by melancholystar | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked it, you must of really loved this person, i loved the way you ussed your words, it reminds me of the way i love my bf, i love this one,
    good wirte
    trinity
    | Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by in_a_trap | [ Reply to This ]



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