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    Author: tinkerbellsas
    ASL Info:    22/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 67/66/32
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 560
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1274



    Description:
       this is kinda of a revision of the poem learning ..I think i like this one better


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    Loving you is my life's work
    All I want to do is see you smile
    Hold you in my arms
    And be together forever

    Everytime I close my eyes
    Your face is all I see
    The light in your eyes
    And your smile so sweet

    I know you are not the same
    As the ones who have hurt me before
    You would never hurt me like that
    You'll always love me the way you should

    I love you, I believe you, I trust you
    You can take those words to heart
    I'm just still a little scared
    That I will lose you somehow

    The happiest moment was when
    You asked me to be your bride
    I just worry a little bit
    That we won't make it to that day

    That's why I do the things I do
    Why I say the things I say
    Why I worry the way I do
    And ask so many questions of you

    I know it's not a good excuse
    I just can't handle losing you
    You are the air I breath
    And the light in the darkness of my life

    You make me whole
    And I know you feel that way too
    Those feelings are all that matters
    Your love is all I need





    Submitted on 2005-12-21 20:53:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      just a tad repititive, but it does add to the whole theme. my favortire stanza was

    That's why I do the things I do
    Why I say the things I say
    Why I worry the way I do
    And ask so many questions of you
    | Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by Itzmeemiflee | [ Reply to This ]
      i agree it is a little repetitive, but it expresses lot of feeling.
    i like the line when you said "I know it's not a good excuse
    I just can't handle losing you
    You are the air I breath
    And the light in the darkness of my life"
    alot because it truely reflects how i feel at times...
    | Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by sword stalker | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this poem, it has lots of emotion. its a tad bit repetitive, but that ok
    keep up the god work!
    --->Elisa xoxo
    | Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by prittee1 | [ Reply to This ]


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