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    dots Submission Name: I Grewdots
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    Author: anile2
    ASL Info:    32/F
    Elite Ratio:    5.72 - 20/19/7
    Words: 59
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 233
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 367



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    dotsI Grewdots
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    You came to be tender and sweet
    I soothed, I cooed
    You grew
    You smiled the world was bright
    and you grew
    You soon took off and stood tall
    You grew
    Once agian you amazed me
    and you grew
    Independance came to take you away
    You grew
    I kissed your heart
    I nursed your soul
    I grew




    Submitted on 2005-12-21 21:35:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Sometimes it is good to keep the reader guessing. I believe that if you had changed this in any way you would have taken away from the effect that it has. The mother in you comes out here as you watch and nurture a child.
    What most people fail to realize is that as your child grows you grow also.
    You learn a new language and you learn to be silent when it is needed. Each child teaches us something and there will never be a time when we can not learn from them. When that happens then we will already have died within.

    Nicely done. Short and sweet

    Respect and Admiration

    Clyde
    | Posted on 2007-09-24 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
      Good write...
    You could have made it longer but i guess that it would ruin the essence of the poem.
    Like the others said, you could have added your own details. But its all up to you.
    Congratulations on the nice poem
    | Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked the poem... but it left me wanting to know more... but it was good. i want to know wat exactly and where the feelings came from. let me know
    | Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by submarine | [ Reply to This ]



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