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Birthday


Author: Itzmeemiflee
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Spur of the moment writing. Tell me what you think.


Birthday



Sally got up early
To do her hair and brush her teeth
She got dressed in a skirt
And put on her fancy socks

Sally went downstairs
To sit at the table
Waiting patiently
For her parents to come downstairs

Sally thought
About the presents she would be getting
Thinking about what surprises
Her parents had in store

Sally knew they were pretending
To forget about her birthday
she knew it was all an act
And today she would be getting what she wanted

Sally heard her father coming down the stairs
She smoothed down her hair
And folded her hands
On the table

Sally saw her father look at her
From across the room
She saw the looks that passed on his face
Surprise, Question, then guilt

Sally saw him come over to her
Peck her on the cheek
"I'm sorry baby," he said
"I forgot."

Sally knew he was kidding
and that he was just waiting for her mom
When she heard Mom come down the stairs
She sat up taller

Sally saw her mom stop
and look at her dad
she saw the look that passed between them
and she saw her mom's hands begin to shake

Sally felt her mother touch her hand
"Tomorrow, baby, I'll make up for this,
you can get whatever you want.
I'm sorry baby, but I forgot."

Sally looked at them
Not sure if there are joking anymore
She looked at them
And felt a tear roll down her cheek

Sally got up from the table
And walked up the stairs
She went to her room
and sat on the bed

Sally laid on her pillow
Hugging Mr. Bear
And she cried and cried
Until she fell back asleep





Submitted on 2005-12-21 22:43:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  a very sad poem and very touching and the way it was put was really genuine , quite a great job you did there, keeps one's attention up all time , good job
| Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by Tarek Refaat | [ Reply to This ]
  good story hear, i think i would like a little more feeling, and a little more description to make it seem more poetic, but i like that it's a poem told in third person, i really like that part.
| Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by colerinja | [ Reply to This ]


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