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    dots Submission Name: SAVE MEdots
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    Author: submarine
    Elite Ratio:    2.4 - 128/91/45
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       i've been a bit sad for sometime now... and really dont want to be... but i cant seem to find a way or a reason to be happy.....


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    dotsSAVE MEdots
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    Save me,from this pit of sadness,
    I cant live like this,
    Pull me up' i need to breathe.

    The pain is too much,
    It stresses me out,
    Cant go on anymore,
    So please... Save me.

    There is no strenght left,
    I grow weaker by the day,
    This spirit is starting to fade,
    I need help....
    Just Save me.




    Submitted on 2005-12-22 00:18:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really really liked this poem. there's just something about it that really appeals to me. it's deep and there's lots of emotion behind it. i liked the language you used too. you need to edit it a little, but theres nothing major wrong with it.
    keep up the good work!
    --->Elisa xoxo
    | Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by prittee1 | [ Reply to This ]


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