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    dots Submission Name: Hopedots
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    Author: robbie111999
    Elite Ratio:    6.72 - 25/17/9
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       I hope this poem touches the heart of someone who knows of both the hope and the despair that can identify with this theme.
    I welcome any responses to this verse which is a fumbling attempt at expressing some thoughts.


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    dotsHopedots
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    It is the ageless thing for us,
    Hope that there is life ahead,
    Here I am long-lived and depressed
    "Tis the season to be joyful
    But sadness of things past
    Can be so haunting, so maddenly dark
    Memories we wish could be erased
    Come back to stalk us and make us wish
    There were a new day, a new beginning.
    Regrets swarm in, making us dreary
    But we are still alive, sensing and striving
    Alone, and yet not alone.
    Out there is a friend, someone who knows
    The plight of the stranger, the fate of the lost
    I hear his voice, I harken to his words,
    A spark is kindled, a hope renewed
    That there is a soul who knows the truth
    Of suffering and endurance,
    Of fumbliing one's way
    Through the darkness and into the light
    God bless that friend, that ally in angst
    Who knows the depths and keeps alive
    The glimmer of hope, the voice of the Yes!
    His hand he extends, i take it in mine
    And solemnly vow the future is now.
    Let there be light, let there be hope
    For that is the pulse that stirs me anew
    I know not the future nor the fate that awaits
    But of this I am sure, no hope is in vain.




    Submitted on 2005-12-22 00:34:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I was actually attracted to this piece by it's title, cause one of my own poems has the same title. It really was a tremedous piece to read. It's nice seeing how the same topic can be viewed and written out in different ways. I truly admire how you've layed out the theme of this one though. It is an isnpiring piece. I would be honoured to hear what you thought of my 'Hope'. Obviously it revolves around hope, but is quite different in content if not in meaning. I'd really appreciate it.

    Thanks,

    DeepDreamer2008
    | Posted on 2005-12-23 00:00:00 | by DeepDreamer2008 | [ Reply to This ]
      I felt so deeply moved the first time I read this piece that I almost cried... I can so totally relate to this poem... It reminds of so many things I had at the back of my mind ... stuff from the past ... by the time I was so highly depressed. I used to think that everything in my life was just crap that nothing had sense... but one thing always remained sparking and that was hope... I never gave up you to it you know... For me it's quite beautiful a concept... and quite inspiring as well. I particularly liked the way you mixed this aforementioned concept with the already – mentioned - gloomy past and friendship ... which was one of the reasons I felt so touched... I mean ……sometimes one feels that one’s friends are all we have... eve when they are not many.

    As for the ending I reckon that's brilliant. It was the part I enjoyed the most... it's sharp ... and quite encouraging.

    Well … that’s all …. Take care ….
    Ethan.
    | Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by Ethan Brody | [ Reply to This ]
      well i really like the write / it's so kind and caring / and so down to earth / it makes me this of a falling leaf that slow drags it's spirit to the green grass / all in all i think this is really good .../. i love the line:

    Regrets swarm in, making us dreary

    Janus
    | Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by J W I | [ Reply to This ]



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