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    dots Submission Name: Tomorrow todaydots
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    Author: Universal
    ASL Info:    17/f/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 46/48/35
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsTomorrow todaydots
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    The emblems of Nations brandished like weapons
    Bow down to the cruellest oppressor that threatens
    Choice is a dream not a privilege or right
    Who will they kill when no ones able to fight?
    A Pack as our people, our subservience to mob
    When moralities a fiction what’s left to rob?
    Lead by this censorship like a swine to its trough
    Fatted by propaganda we stand bloated and scoff
    The image flickers unnoticed of a world in the past
    Where a flag for the future flies at half mast




    Submitted on 2005-12-22 03:38:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was very powerful and intense. It is true, i believe with how our people are acting, life will soon no longer be. We will kill off everything and think nothing of it. Our government needs work to help keep everyone safe.

    Wonderful job, keep it up

    Akai_Ame
    | Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by Akai_Ame | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW! powerful!Last line is fanastic...really makes me morn for what kind of future our world really has coming!Nicely written!
    | Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by anile2 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow.. very intense.

    Nicely done. I love the feel of this. It takes you in and rams you through it.

    I wish more folks payed enogh attention to get this feeling from the news. Maybe then we could change some things.

    Good job.

    Chrystine
    | Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]


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