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    dots Submission Name: Mr. Hydedots
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    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 923
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 783



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       We all change for the worse one time in our life.
    Changed the " ' "


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    dotsMr. Hydedots
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    To find Life's solution
    I must leave behind pain's pollution.
    With everything I hold close pushed aside
    Left alone committing emotional suicide.
    I think I'll live as Mr. Hyde
    Never keep all the sin inside.
    I have to get this chip off my shoulder
    Have to turn my back becoming colder.
    Emotions shrouded by a black-hole sun
    Captured in the heat and over done.
    Never felt the knife going in
    Driven in severing sin from sin.
    No sight from my crimson iris
    Hate spreading through me like a virus.
    In me should no one trust
    I shall enjoy life and all its lust.
    Everything I shall eat will be honey sweet
    And if all else fails I will live in deceit.




    Submitted on 2004-04-26 16:18:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Thanx fior your comments on secrets of my soul i am not sure if you enjoyed it or not the cross i also wear for my own reasons i like your version of mr hyde i think we all hav that side
    on secrets i do not copy any bodies work i do not have to i can pretty much wite about anything i choose most of my titles from other peoples thoughts will look for more of your posts and read and comment
    great write
    sandman
    | Posted on 2005-02-04 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      the is beautiful...I loved the words you used that made it flow...it had so much feelings and emotion that it made this piece really stand out...I liked how you made this piece original...I also liked how you worded the feeling...all around it was a great write!
    ~Jaime Lee Pachétte~
    | Posted on 2004-04-26 00:00:00 | by darkened_soul | [ Reply to This ]
      eh- didn't like the rhyme seemed force,I did really like the imagery, great usage. Word choice superb too. Overall nicely done.
    | Posted on 2004-04-26 00:00:00 | by roxygirl239 | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this, I am guessing you typed this out, copied, than paste, because of the numbers, I have done that before too, lol. I like the idea of this, and the concept is great, I like how you are certain everything you eat will be honey sweet, and if not, well hell, live in deceit, nice job!
    | Posted on 2004-04-26 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]
      i loved the rhyming scheme in this, and the imagery was great. i'm a little confused about the whole #8217 part though
    | Posted on 2004-04-26 00:00:00 | by slwht | [ Reply to This ]


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