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Today is My Special Day


Author: Sweet as Sugar
ASL Info:    17/F/WY
Elite Ratio:    3.7 - 43 /50 /13
Words: 100
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Today i am 17 and loving every moment of it. 12/22 rocks!!

This write is to my father who as i have grown has still not cared to find me. Today on my special day i will be happy and carefree and no one will take that from me.

Sorry this is short and pretty bad, but its out there so go easy on it.


Today is My Special Day



A Birthday wish is all I have
And the thought of you today.
All these years unknown and unloved in oh so many ways,
But guess what
Today is my special day.

I sit and wonder if you will do the same
If you even care enough to actually learn my name.
My hopes will shatter just as they always have
But guess what
Today is my special day.

Its been a long year.
Its been a long life,
And thoughts of you will not chain me down
tight.
Because guess what,
Today is MY special day.




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  Happy belated birthday Gwen. Given the circumstance, I applaud your resolve, and positive outlook.

You have many many birthdays ahead of you. Cherish and enjoy each and every one of them.

Frank.
| Posted on 2006-01-22 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
  Happy 17th Birthday
I hope the future answers all your dreams
We all need to take time and reflect on our life
You choose the perfect day your birthday
Remain Positive
Im sur your Father is somewhere Wishing you a Happy Birthday
God Bless
Ron
| Posted on 2005-12-23 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  Happy Birthday! you have such a good spirit about you, that it's contagiuos. liked the pure honesty of your words. It didn't flow perfectly and rhyme just so, because you were speaking from your heart. Bravo! I loved the way you admit your father not being around hurts, but you won't let that ruin your mood, at least for today. You took control of your emotions. What a strong young woman. I tip my hat off to you. Enjoy your day, and many more. Great write.

Maggie
| Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
  Hello Sugar, this is a very sad and honest poem and it touched me to read it. Being a father I am very sensitive about childless parents and children without a parent. If I could say anything to you it would be that as you grow older and experience more of the world you will learn that things are not always the way they appear. There could be so many reasons why your father has chose not to contact you that you should not judge him now. Also make every day your special day and don't let your feelings of desertion control how you live your life. Diamond Dan
| Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by dmm | [ Reply to This ]
  HAPPY 17TH BIRTHDAY! Hope you're enjoying it so far. . I'm sorry that your dad hasn't been in your life for a while. I guess it's one of those things that just might never happen or it will at the least expected time. But on to your write...

I thought it was good. I just have one suggestion structure wise and I'll show you an example of what I'm talking about. where you have,

"All these years unknown and unloved in oh so many ways,"

you should probably break it down like make the last half of that line into another line. Cause those kind of long sentences seem to run on and seem sloppy. But if you want you can look for some others in there too cause I think it would be stupid of me to point them all out. But anyways I hope your birthday is great! . Good write.

Brenna
| Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by Day DreaMeR | [ Reply to This ]
  Love it. And Happy Birthday! :) I just turned 17 3 weeks ago... however.. my birthday was lame.. hah... I hope yours is better and it truly is a "special day" for you. I like this... it shows your strength... that it doesnt matter about your dad.. because nothing can bring you down today. My favorite stanza is the last one.. "long year/long life" it's great. And the caps on "MY" really helped to get your point across. (Sorry.. i'm lacking criticism on this one.. hah)

Have a great day though!
Happy Birthday!
Brooke
| Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by melancholystar | [ Reply to This ]


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