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    dots Submission Name: Haunted Shell- poemdots
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    Author: LivingShadow
    ASL Info:    15/Female/Colorado
    Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 21/24/8
    Words: 210
    Class/Type: Poetry/Vampire
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       It just came to me. Not a rant. And not about ME. I just used the first person to spite the man.


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    Haunted Shell
    by LivingShadow

    Within the blazing inferno
    i await my fate
    praying to pass judgment
    after my sins of late
    but low i have been scorned
    for the deeds iíve done
    sentenced to eternal purgatory
    doomed the hearts of whom iíve won
    for they never saw me coming
    in the dead of night
    black locks around my heart
    no time to fall to fright
    murderer of the hopes and dreams
    the innocent did aspire
    i killed their futures in a single blow
    a flash of black attire
    for it is i who prowls the street
    from broken cobblestone
    to empty black of asphalt
    my deadly skills i long to hone
    iíve been a corpse for s long
    that my emotions locked inside
    have long ceased to escape their hold
    their time they donít even bide
    for mow iím forever sentenced to
    the unholy life of pain
    aching for the ones i love
    who have passed through heavenís gait
    while i shall wait here paying for
    the deeds of another
    who took my life tossed it out
    damned to this horror
    i will haunt this shell that once was me
    until the end of time
    iíll be watching all of it
    from this cursed life of mine




    Submitted on 2005-12-22 12:56:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this was really good! it like sucked the reader in (well, it did me!) definatly a fav! your use of imagery and description is top notch, but just an ovbservation- try not to put too much into your poems, else it just turns into a narrative!
    | Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by bambi144 | [ Reply to This ]
      flow was a lil off at times and a few typos and confusing at times but I like Vampire poems as u can tell if u look at my page I have a series working on u might like that kepe it up if u ever post anymore poems let me know

    -Logan-
    | Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by in_my_suffering | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, confusing at times, not sure exactly what the exact details are, but its inspirational. great write, keep up da gud work!
    | Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by irish_fairy1018 | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm horrible with grammar so i can't really talk [censored] about your bad grammar, because still yet i understood it all. it was some-what hard figuring out what you were talking abotu exactly. but it was written well. thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by Cannablisjunkie | [ Reply to This ]


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