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    dots Submission Name: New Orealns my city V2dots
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    Author: heavy knowledge
    ASL Info:    15/m/slidell, L.a.(N.O.)
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 106/156/34
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 803
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 895



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       dis verse 2 be happy


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    dotsNew Orealns my city V2dots
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    Welcome back to New Orleans this is verse 2
    look at the azzure in the sky covered by the baby blue
    Leave uptown and i bring u 2 the darkside
    Hopin that a nugga dont turn into a homocide
    My city so indowed with culture leave people in awe
    This is alot to saok up u might want a straw
    But a nugga aint got a roof so i must withdraw
    Its hot down here let them up north boys thaw
    And u know these be the purest lyrics u ever saw
    So my city aint the only thing that leave you in awe
    And if u want a party i take u 2 a place called mardi gras
    But make sure u dont read over 0.8 cause its against the law
    But u can still get drunk off of
    That beautiful african american women love
    And that how it go in the city of flood waters and blood
    And in the end we gonna flourish as if we were a flower bud




    Submitted on 2005-12-22 17:35:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this one is good too. it ain't touching ur first verse though. i'm bout to read the last one and see what u working with.
    | Posted on 2006-05-30 00:00:00 | by young p | [ Reply to This ]
      there was quite a few fresh lines in here....I liked the first verse much more though... I'm not real sure why but this one is good too


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    the aberrant soldier
    | Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]
      My city so indowed with culture leave people in awe
    This is alot to saok up u might want a straw
    But a nugga aint got a roof so i must withdraw

    my favorite three lines. damn chaz. u got some pretty good punchlines going here. and i think this is the most consistant flow i've ever seen from u. i read the whole thing without breaking stride. this is another fave and if the last one is good. it'll be another fave
    | Posted on 2005-12-23 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved the flow of this poem as well. The ending was beautiful because it is very true. Love the point of view it was written from. Good Job!
    | Posted on 2005-12-23 00:00:00 | by Saimi Marie | [ Reply to This ]
      What an ending! I loved this. I loved the flow and the rhyme shceme of this. You made me proud here. That was cute stating the alcohol limit...priceless.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]


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