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    dots Submission Name: Reflectionsdots

    Author: Jerilynn
    ASL Info:    59, woman, U.S.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 68/66/20
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 977
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       I sometimes wish I could do this.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    In the early morning
    I can see through the trees
    A double vision
    Of flawless perfection.
    The dew on the grass
    Becomes a vapor
    Which then
    Becomes a mist
    Filling the air
    With an unearthly
    Mysterious beauty
    Giving my imagination wings.
    I feel as though I am
    Looking upon
    A portal
    To another world
    The smooth surface
    Of the pond
    Reflects another place
    Of such excellent serenity
    I long to step
    Out of the turmoil
    Of this world
    And become one
    With the peaceful calm
    That appears to me
    From the other side
    Of this reflection.

    Submitted on 2005-12-22 20:15:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      In my mind I can see what you have written.
    Favorite sequence of words is, "giving my
    imagination wings." Only thing I would have
    done is not used the word "unearthly," because
    the poem is so very "down to earth."
    Just beautiful...had to read it again! LOL!
    | Posted on 2005-12-23 00:00:00 | by KimmyMim | [ Reply to This ]
      A lovely and wish like piece. The way you described this was excellent and your style is very effective and very good. Keep looking, you may find this place for real some day.
    | Posted on 2005-12-23 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      this is great write... i sometimes wish i could do this as well... i love the way u express urself through nature.

    keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by submarine | [ Reply to This ]

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