It is a little choppy, methinks, but it is still an interesting piece. That picture was emotionally scarring! Anyways, I liked it, I think. Though I tend to be more of a romantic, and any negative takes on love tend to be sad-making for me. But it was a truthful poem, and many people do perceive love to be like that, hurtful and confusing. Ah, well. It's what we pay to be human. ^_^
I really enjoyed your poem. It's humourous and cynical. I loved cupid being a mischievous villian that tortures us with emotions that we cannot control. It's true but also sad in a way. I liked the rythm and the gathering momentum of the poem. Only the fifth stanza sticks out as somewhat awkward.
ha i love it, i like how cupid is shown as more of a villian then a beautiful being of love like he is portrayed mostly. the name totaly made me come read this and im glad i did its everything i hoped it to be. its an awesomn poem for people to relate to and feel better when reading it. the starting and the end where both really well, i also like the words you chose and the way you wrote them.
i like this alot: He will plunge you into love The most deadly form of vice Then he watches from above Never offering advice
this seems very true and makes alot of sense and put in a really cool way. defianatly one of the better poems iv seen on here, i shall go look at other poems youv done now. by the way i like your cupid picture too. thankyou char
I couldn't resist reading this poem jus looking at the title! haha. it's a great chance to get back at Cupid for all the acts of mischief he created that resulted in heartbreaks in mismatches, sleepless nights and endless quarrels.. funny, witty and making the reader yearn for a greater stab at revenge. the only bad thing i can say is that i feel the rhyming is a bit awkward and inconsistent cos it's kinda random.. or maybe it's supposed to be that way? haha.
bravo.. I really enjoyed this and it is so very true.. and what is the worst is that fact that he catches you with your guard down and at the worst time so will we go around in live looking over our shoulder for that little winged bandit aiming for our heart.. no until next time your singing the song of I welcome cupid.. chow hugs Penny
I like the subject, and the pace is pretty good...I like a darker take on the cupid, he doesn't get the hostile treatment he sometimes deserves...this is just a small, personal issue, but there seems to be something awkward about the last stanza.
RWS is right about the fifth stanza, but that's easily fixed if you choose to...
Good poem, I'll be regarding Cupid with suspicion for the rest of my days...
Sounds as if you've experienced the agonies of love at first sight (and felt the effects of love's terminal condition when the ardor cools). Your shift to first person in the fifth stanza almost snapped my neck, it happened so suddenly. Perhaps a little revision of that stanza is in order to maintain both the tone and pace of the poem. Other than that, nicely done cynical little love song. Take care. Bill.