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    dots Submission Name: New Orleans my city V3dots

    Author: heavy knowledge
    ASL Info:    15/m/slidell, L.a.(N.O.)
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 106/156/34
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 685
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       this is the last verse u read this one u should read em all cause u need 2 get the whole package

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    dotsNew Orleans my city V3dots

    And 2 end this lyrical outpour i give u my last verse
    And out of them all this is lyricaly the worse
    My 504 people endowed me lyricaly wit a gift i just cant quit
    breakin down rhymes as if i where Brad Pitt
    And my oral cavity like a radio that only transmit
    Lyrics that make people phlebotomize as if i slit
    Your throat at let my new orleans flow ooze out
    Let the sun shine and cause a drought
    Make the clouds part as if i were Moses
    My rhymes is brain sick and you people know this
    Cause my lyrics come beguiled with a disease called cancer
    Pray to the heaven requiering an answer
    And that is just a taste of the lyrical jumbo from my domain
    Change you and have this creole blood streem through your veins
    And the damage is done to the past and the future
    Tryin to sow my city bak together stich it bak with a suture

    (chorus x2)

    Submitted on 2005-12-23 10:50:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i'ma say it again. this one is tight but it still ain't touching ur first verse. u getting kinda good chaz. [censored] u might get better than troy
    | Posted on 2006-05-30 00:00:00 | by young p | [ Reply to This ]
      hey happy new year to ya thanx for checkin in and commenting
    i was reading some of your comments on your posts from others dont get discouraged by their words
    i am not up on the new way of talking but i do understand some of it and usually get the jist to what people are talking about
    i liked your post great expression should throughout
    at my age in life i really dont give a censored what people say or think as i stand up for me
    great writing keep it up and thanx again
    | Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      And my oral cavity like a radio that only transmit
    Lyrics that make people phlebotomize as if i slit

    not only has ur flow gotten better, u also seemed to have broadened ur vocabulary while away. that's really good. becuz we can't keep saying the same [censored] over and over again. this is another fave. good job chaz. rep our town
    | Posted on 2005-12-23 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn! This was off the heezy. You kept the same flow from the other two verses. And you lyrics was tight. You brought out little things that make me proud to be from Louisiana. You did your thing bro. Good stuff.

    | Posted on 2005-12-23 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]

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