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Missing you


Author: anile2
ASL Info:    32/F
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Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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it was christmas eve the nite I wrote this...My husband was deployed over seas in Afghanistan..he called to talk to the kids and I...That feeling of emptiness just about killed me...Knowing I still had to be postive for the kids but missing my soulmate!!I knew that what I was feeling had to be put on paper...I sent him this poem in an email as my christmas gift to him...He still can't read it without gettin teary eyed..and hes been out of the military for 5 years!!!


Missing you



On this nite before christmas
The ring of the phone
A crackle and a pause on the end
I heard a mans voice

Merry Christmas Baby.......
How are the kids?

With a tear in my voice
I replied
All is just fine keep peace in mind.
with sorrow in voices along went the talk

I wish you were here
I need you so much

We talked about gifts and how they layed out
A thought of emptiness crossed into our hearts
Please bring him home safely
Oh how i miss him

How the kids miss you
They need you right here

Tonight we would be preparing for santa's arrival
But here we are spending it apart
I think of the day
Near in our future we will see one another

I do understand
you are defending our freedom

Please dear Santa,
on this nite before christmas
When you stop at my home
Take him my sweet kisses

Give him tight hugs
Wish him my love






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  I am in awe at this write. I do understand this completely. I remember thes times so well. 22 yrs in the service I spent 8 yrs away from home. I missed many holidays and birthdays.
My heart aches for you and your family.
I take my hat off to your spouse as he serves his country and sacrifices his time with the family.
I am now at a loss for words at this write.
I am humbled because I forgot what it was like to feel these old feelings. Thank you for reminding me of our brothers in arms far away
from home this christmas and the tears and fears of the family who is doing their part also by sacrificing their precious time.

God Bless and may you have a very Merry Christmas. May your husband return to you safe and sound.

I will add this to my fav's

Respect and Admirations

Clyde
| Posted on 2005-12-23 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
  My heart really goes out to you. I can't say myself I have a loved one overseas fighting but I can imagine how hard it is.

My good wishes go to all those fighting for us.

happy holidays!

-mystmaker
| Posted on 2005-12-23 00:00:00 | by MystMaker | [ Reply to This ]
  My goodness, it can't get more intimate and heartfelt than this prayer for the safety of a loved one (disguised as a Christmas wish!. It must be bittersweet to spend a holiday separated from someone so close to your heart as they send their love from so far away. The last stanza of this write was as striking a plea for the safety of a soldier as any I've read. No nitpicks today. Take care and Happy Holidays. Bill.
| Posted on 2005-12-23 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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