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Just Once


Author: SorrelsReality
ASL Info:    25/ Female/ See Quote.
Elite Ratio:    6.52 - 175 /113 /20
Words: 87
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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I think this pretty much explains itself. This was more of a rant than a poem. But it expresses my feelings, opens my soul a bit. I felt a little vulnerable after writing this.


Just Once



Is it me?
Or is love considered a luxury anymore?

Noone really takes love seriously.
A Joke. Or in my case, a myth.
Folk tales of a princess saved by her prince
clouds reality for a young girl, still trapped.

She's screaming from within me
I can feel her pain
The realization that when she grows up
Love dosen't exist.

Empty tears, superficial dreams
fantasy.
Real life exhausts the heart
leaving it tattered and weak.

Just once, can the fairytale be for me?




Submitted on 2005-12-23 15:28:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I wish you would start believing in fairytales again. Life is so much more beautiful when you do..

You are so much more beautiful when you do.

I still love this poem.
| Posted on 2007-04-16 00:00:00 | by UnspokenDreamer | [ Reply to This ]
  How can you look into the eyes of the world around you and not believe that love exists for you? Sorrel, I don't even know what state you are from, what town, urban or rural, what your voice sounds like, how you smell (lol and that is important), what kind of food you like, what kind of movies you like, if you play any instrument, if you sing in the shower, if you like rainy days or sunshine, if you would rather watch the sunrise or the sunset, I don't know much of anything. But I will tell you what I do know about you. You are amazing. I think thats all I need to say.
| Posted on 2006-05-22 00:00:00 | by UnspokenDreamer | [ Reply to This ]
  I've felt this way all too often. You've roped every woman that has had fallen love, whether it be by her own doing, or by someone elses. I think this is not only sweet, but real...in a fairytale-ish sort of way. You give the aura of a fairytale etc etc...yet the subject itself is undeniably in your face and not hard to understand. We all want the prince, the full monty of fairytale dreams to come true. But I hate to be the one to burst your bubble sweetheart, "Noone gets the full fairytale". That's just the way it is.

It's a nice thought though.


*bunches of hugs*

Avry
| Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by SouthrnQT | [ Reply to This ]
  I really like this write. I was just telling my sister that I want the fairytale love, and I don't want to settle for anything less. She told me I was getting old. I am going to hold on to my hopes for that love and maybe die single (depressing, maybe I will settle :) I really appreciate you sharing this, because I can relate to what you're saying, and your delivery is very genuine.
Nicely
| Posted on 2005-12-30 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]
  Hi... I liked it almost as much as your last write.
* It was fun to read
* It carried a lot of emotion about your feelings
* I could relate to it
The only things that I did not like about the poem (I read it 12 times to find the second one)
* It ended too fast; you could have expressed your inner feelings more
* "Noone really takes" was a typo and what you actually meant to say was "No one..." Most people don't really care but I think it is very important.

Let me know what you think when you comment on something of mine...
Peace
John
| Posted on 2005-12-25 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
  As a poem, it is ragged, and more prosey than poetic, really. Also, you question yourself through out your poem, which does, indeed, show your insecurity. Make a point. Just say it, because poetry is a place where moderation and censoring can fall away.
| Posted on 2005-12-23 00:00:00 | by Clarkie | [ Reply to This ]
  This is written with such honesty and I can feel the longing in the write. You seemed to have had some relationships that went astray.
I am a father af 3 daughters. Each have had their own experience with a bit of love and each have come out with a bit of mistrust against men. This has not detered them from seeking love but has left dear old dad gaurded against wouldbe boy friends.
Love has so many strings attached that at times we feel that we are puppets to the emotion.
From the write I can glimpse some understanding and mistrust. This is normal.

Now that you have bared your soul to us here on ES, it is time to let go of those feeling and find out that not all relationships are doomed.
Fairytales can happen if you allow them to.
I have been married 25 yrs and she is still my queen. We have ruled or should I say guided our children (My own little Kingdom) during the good and bad times. My oldest son has found his princess and she has found her prince. My oldest daughter has found her prince charming and with dads firm grip (Not that he heeds it) he will become a good husband.
I guess what I am trying to say is that there is someone for everyone. We just have to look in the right places for them.
Remember that fairytales always follow a plot. Life itself happens in reality. Make of it what you will and accept it for what it is; life

Again I like this write.

Hope to read more

Respect and Admiration

Clyde
| Posted on 2005-12-23 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
  I have felt this way myself in the past! I thought there was no one for me but prayer helps and maybe one day we both will live our dreams and find that one person that was made for us untill then live life to the fullest and don't let it get you down. By the way thanks for being so open in this poem!
Kelley Frost
| Posted on 2006-11-01 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]


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