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Author: MyKemicalfailur
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I reached deep down inside to find the smallest inkling of inspiration to write something. anything. I was desperate. and Finally. I got something. Nothing worthy of any praise. But it was something. It's not good. but... still.. it was something. and I'm fine with that. I was tired of keeping everything in and not writing...it feels good to write again...I'm not sure what happened..but..It seems as though I maybe starting all over with writing...they'll get better with time... I think I may add to it.. someday...


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Words unsaid
Flowing down her cheeks
Feelings unfelt
Left on the bedside table

A love once pure
Stained with lust
A child unborn
Branded for the rest of it's life

A life once worth living
Ended.
Forever.




Submitted on 2005-12-23 18:42:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Nicely said for its length. I agree with the others, you were straight to the point and said excatly what you were thinking. It's a sad poem, but I like it. Nice write.

With love,
Jacob
| Posted on 2006-07-13 00:00:00 | by Jacob Seibert | [ Reply to This ]
  I love this poem b/c u just write down exactly wat u think.And thats wat i do.I think thats wat everyone shud do even if it dont make ne sense.Great job!
| Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by suicidal_chick | [ Reply to This ]
  u write exactly how i think poetry should be written....u just put ur feeling on paper..not worring if they make much sence to n e one...as long as u kno wut ur going to say...so yea...awesome!
FEFE..btw...thanx 4 wut u said...
| Posted on 2006-01-12 00:00:00 | by darksweetness | [ Reply to This ]
  Your poem hit me hard, it seems like theres so many hidden messages inside, and alot of people will not see that. keep writing ~Amanda
| Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by babeegurl13 | [ Reply to This ]
  it's a good start...feels more like a list of things you want to say in poems, without actually feeling like a poem itself, maybe you just miss writing.

I get like that sometimes. I've had to learn to not try to write poetry...I can fashion words, rhymes, all that sort of stuff comes easy, but as i don't really have anything to complain about in life, what i need is concepts. When an idea for a poem comes into my head, as in a subject or situation, then the poem comes easy...

but when i'm in a situation where i really want to write but i don't know what to say...that's when i produce crap :o)

nice little poem anyway, to keep things ticking over until your next big one comes along.

merry christmas.
| Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by Senna27NZ | [ Reply to This ]
  nice write must short poems ppl would say add mroe but I think this is just perfect the way it is good concept I really like it u didn't have to say very much to get such a strong point accross keep it up

-logan-
| Posted on 2005-12-23 00:00:00 | by in_my_suffering | [ Reply to This ]


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