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    dots Submission Name: cowarddots
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    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    19/f
    Elite Ratio:    2.89 - 337/405/242
    Words: 218
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    the new day is upon me
    all my old mistakes are behind me
    the old voice of reason is haunting me
    it seems to repeat your name around this time
    i could scratch out my eyeballs so i couldnt see
    all the couples holding hands
    but,
    the emptiness inside isnt all his fault
    i added to the despair.

    you always said you would hold me through the night
    when the morning light would shine upon me
    i was alone.

    ive been alone for so long that ive thrown away your dreams
    they never were mine to begin with
    i dont mind now
    the wailing gets softer while the winds get higher
    your lies pile on more baby, im not listening cant you see?

    how did we get here?
    cant you see im not the same anymore
    ive grown into something other then what you want me to be
    im not this naive girl you fell for
    im the girl you hate with a passion for breaking your heart.

    it doesnt bother me anymore to hear your name
    i dont bleed out my pain anylonger
    i over came such a powerful urge
    i beat the system.

    some one save him
    dont come for me
    i smile with such beauty
    that he will never see.




    Submitted on 2005-12-23 18:46:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very nice write!
    for some reason it reminds me of Kate Chopins "The awakening"

    **REad it? You should! **
    Keep up the nice work and I will be waiting for more
    Amber
    | Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by PoeticSoul666 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow the beggining showed soo much sadness and hopelessness and then it just 180'd and "she" became so confident and powerful. i like that, you dont see that in love poems that often. good job

    - kase
    | Posted on 2005-12-23 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, this is wonderful...

    the old voice of reason is haunting me

    I love that line. I think people can relate to not only the whole thing but that line in itself. I really like this...you did an awesome job.. I'll have to go and check out some more of your stuff.. and add this to my favs! cuz.. it's awesome.
    | Posted on 2005-12-23 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]


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