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    dots Submission Name: Simondots
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    Author: Ratboy
    ASL Info:    17/Male/South Slocan B.C.
    Elite Ratio:    5.17 - 50/73/22
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1409
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 698



    Description:
       I can't decide if this is funny or not.


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    dotsSimondots
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    Simon isnít really bad
    Simon is a troubled lad
    Simon is a little sad
    Simon has no mom or dad

    Simon doesnít like to share
    Simon doesnít seem to care
    Simon cut off Joeyís hair
    Simonís in the naughty chair

    Simon had a fit today
    Simon didnít get his way
    Simon threw a stick at Ray
    Simon isnít good at play

    Simon missed the second bell
    Simon makes my life a hell
    Simon tackled Dan, who fell
    Simon bullied Matt as well

    Simon doesnít do whatís told
    Simon called me fat and old
    Simon cannot be controlled
    Simonís doesnít fit the mold




    Submitted on 2005-12-23 22:30:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This might have been a bit more twisted if the narrator were Simon (a sort of 'Twilight Zone' moment) but the effect is nonetheless sardonic, especially the naughty chair. I wouldn't say this is or isn't funny (I'll leave that to the various readers), but it is a very interesting work. This would make such a warped Dr. Seuss morality tale that I'd suggest a series. Nicely done. Take care. Bill.
    | Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      hahahahahahaha!
    this is hilarious!

    simon doesn't like to share
    simon doesn't seem to care
    simon cut off Joey's hair
    simon's in the naughty chair

    simon had a fit today
    simon didn't get his way
    simon threw a stick at Ray
    simon isn't good at play

    I love this! very cute, well-written, and yes, it is funny! but isn' t it spelled 'mold'?
    maybe I'm wrong. oh well.
    definetly on my favorites list!


    great job, Sam!

    Avril54
    | Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by Avril54 | [ Reply to This ]


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