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    dots Submission Name: I dodots
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    Author: prittee1
    ASL Info:    16/f/aus
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 13/21/6
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 797
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 675



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       I'm sorry bout this one, guys, it's terrible, i know


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    dotsI dodots
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    She tells you youíre perfect,
    She sayís she adores you,
    But she doesnít love you,
    Like I do.

    He thinks he knows everything about you,
    He thinks youíre the man,
    But he doesnít think of you,
    The way I do.

    They think they understand you,
    They think youíre their little boy,
    But they donít see you,
    How I do.

    You look in the mirror,
    You donít think youíre much,
    But you donít know you,
    The way I do.

    I know everything about you,
    Iíve made you my life,
    But I donít have you,
    And I wish I could say I do.




    Submitted on 2005-12-24 02:14:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked this but one thing that threw me off was in the first stanza how it says "she" and then in the second how it says "he" just confused me a little bit but otherwise it was awesome

    ->Candace<-
    | Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by ArtichokeMosher | [ Reply to This ]
      this is good! but its one of those typical "be with me i love u" songs! it still was good though! this is just wat i thought about it!
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]


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