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Ode to my mother

Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
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Words: 159
Class/Type: Poetry /Lostfriend
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Ode to my mother

Troubled family life
You brought yourself up
No one really ever understood you
Did it tough
Learnt things the hard way
Stretched beyond the limits
Left a trail for others to follow
You were the sun
The moon
The sky-
Anything people said you couldn't do
You did.
Where was the support when you needed it?
Leaned on your own shoulder to cry-
Smiled all the way
When inside you were dying.
To blind to see
Everyone loved you
but you..
But smart and different
don't make you cool
Dared to do
What no one else would
A dreamer
An achiever
Shone like a star-
Didn't let people get the best of you
Was always there to catch the fall out
Where were people to catch your fall out?
It was a one way street in your car
Never looked in the rear view mirror
Such a way for a life to end
Good-bye my mother
Good-bye my friend.

Submitted on 2005-12-24 04:13:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  whoa! this is powerfull! actually this is emotional and sad! did this really happen to u! i really like this a lot! despite da fact that it was sad! good job!
~akaila evonne~
| Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]

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