It looks like you are obsessed with this person. They make you happy, yet you are still in alot of pain. this was very sad and filled with a sense of you want to be saved, rescued from yourself. You want this person to love you to full degree as you love him, and you are willing to die to prove your love...wow. A very good wite.
This was so sad... Full of longing, and love. Bittersweet might be the word I am looking for. It's so beautiful to think that someone could actually think like this, be this way. Always, though, I question in the back in my mind, exactly how ling would those thoughts last. The feelings feel the same. For orginality, I've seem a couple poems like this before. Love is a much traveled path. That doesn't mean it isn't a good poem. I agree it could be a little bit longer. It kinda left me stumbling at the end... I liked the rhythm, it wasn't that slippery smooth kind. More like a drum.
you have a very good rhythem (not that i can spell at all. im terribly sorry)and the poem strikes at me because of that feature. it works, although the last 2 line verse could use 2 more lines. however i know how writers block works...its definetly not fun xoxoxomuchlove-ash