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I hope this happens to you.

Author: Jingles
ASL Info:    19.m.canada
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Just tell me what you think.....I was pretty upset last night and it just flew out of me.

I hope this happens to you.

You think it's easy to live the silent lie.
But your second face is peeling from existence.
Every word spoken,every blink of the eye.
deciet makes itself revealing.
Sickening how easy trust can be offset.
Blatent truth will burn right through your heart.
I hope this happens to you.
And I hope Im there to see it through.
To watch your spirit die.
I hope this happens to you.
And I hope your souls splitting in two.
And you can look me in the eyes.
Your stagnant poise generates a blame.
Filtered through a heart thats dying.
Self absorbed,soon you'll be rung out.
And in this pretensiousness attitude is drown.
The twisted truth inhaled by all.
But it's purest form is thriving.
This will happen to you.
Someone you trust will be untrue.
Rot on the inside.
This will happen to you.
And you'll feel the ache of being used.

Submitted on 2005-12-24 12:13:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This poem is very deep, i can understand your point and besides a spelling it's purest as one word this poem was amazing. ~ Amanda
| Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by babeegurl13 | [ Reply to This ]

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