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    dots Submission Name: New Year 2006dots
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    Author: Ramneet
    ASL Info:    33/F/Boston
    Elite Ratio:    2.99 - 262/107/52
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I want true critical analysis of my poem.I am a scientist so in the poem i am wishing good luck to scientific community for new year 2006.


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    dotsNew Year 2006dots
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    Let us welcome the advent of New Year 2006
    May peace prevails every where
    May happiness shines every face
    May every heart be filled with love & compassion
    No more tsunamis, katrinas and earthquakes
    May pain vanish from our Earth.

    In 2006 may all genes get cloned
    all proteins get expressed
    protein interactions get revealed
    and puzzles get solved.

    May 2006 yield great publications,
    lucrative grants
    and make our research
    jubilant and adventurous.





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      Straight and to the point. I hope everything that you wish for comes true. It will benefit us all.

    I enjoyed reading this.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-05-01 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an interesting write
    I understand the desire foe world peace
    We both have this desire
    I only wish people would open there eyes to the simple fact the answer is right in front of us
    It is
    Love Sweet Love
    All we have to do is let it in to our subconcious and spread the beautiful message
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      This seemed almost satiric (yet I'm certain you're sincerely expressing your concerns, albeit in a disjointed manner). This reads as a toast to the coming year spoken at an international convention by a rather dry emcee, not as a series of image-related thoughts on a perticular theme. You still have a week to revise this for 2006 (or a year for '07), so I'd suggest voicing your personal, not professional, concerns for the new year. Just a thought. Happy New Year. Bill.
    | Posted on 2005-12-25 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      wow you want critical and here I go. I find it hard to imagine a poetic scientist and you poem backs up my logic. This piece was a bunch of thouhgts arranged in short lines not in anyway poetic. As a poet it is important for your work to create an image, yield an emotion or make the reader think deeply. None of these was accomplished here.

    If I am correct, scientists think literally and logically. Poets think figuratively and imaginatively. I don't know whether there is a way to combine them. I'm not trying to stereotype you or categorize scientist but from what I know and what this piece shows me you haven't quite left your element.

    Suggestions;
    -Try to create an image of your hopes and dreams for the scientific world in the upcoming year. Not exactly sure how you could do that but it's worth a try.
    -stop being so literal. figurative laguage is always a plus.
    -make ur words flow so that it is pleasing to the ear when read aloud. Flow always adds power to a piece.

    You cant approach poetry like a lab report. Thier is no scientific method for creativity. Let ur hair down and step outside of your box. You just might surprise yourself. I hope my comments have been helpfull.

    "The Rose"
    | Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by Chi-Town Rose | [ Reply to This ]


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