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    dots Submission Name: I Need...dots
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    Author: babeegurl13
    ASL Info:    16/female/ontario,canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 24/52/15
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 775
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 588



    Description:
       this poem describes so many different things right now. any comment would be good.


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    dotsI Need...dots
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    I need you in my arms.
    I need to know you care.
    I need to finally realize,
    That your never going to be there.

    I need you to tell the truth.
    I need you to say ' I love you'
    I need to come to my sences
    And look for someone new

    I need to feel your embrace
    I need you here with me
    I need to quit wondering
    Could this ever possibly be?

    I need to know how
    To you i feel so wrong
    Because i know when im with you
    I feel thats where i belong.





    Submitted on 2005-12-24 21:19:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The last stanza is the highlight of this piece...you've really captured what it feels like to be in a one sided relationship where you're the one giving.
    | Posted on 2005-12-25 00:00:00 | by Universal | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm not sure, but to me this seems to be about imagining being with someone you never will be able to be with, or who doesn't accept you...

    ... it's sad, and I have a lot of experience feeling this way. :P

    atleast, i hope that was what it was about...
    | Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by mrmundane | [ Reply to This ]


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