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this poem describes so many different things right now. any comment would be good.
I need you in my arms.
I need to know you care.
I need to finally realize,
That your never going to be there.
I need you to tell the truth.
I need you to say ' I love you'
I need to come to my sences
And look for someone new
I need to feel your embrace
I need you here with me
I need to quit wondering
Could this ever possibly be?
I need to know how
To you i feel so wrong
Because i know when im with you
I feel thats where i belong.
Submitted on 2005-12-24 21:19:59
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The last stanza is the highlight of this piece...you've really captured what it feels like to be in a one sided relationship where you're the one giving.
| Posted on 2005-12-25 00:00:00 | by
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i'm not sure, but to me this seems to be about imagining being with someone you never will be able to be with, or who doesn't accept you...
... it's sad, and I have a lot of experience feeling this way. :P
atleast, i hope that was what it was about...
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