i love the last few lines of this, you paint a really interesting picture of what its like when your with that special person. To me its about the feeling of complete indestructablility when your with them, and being nothing without them which is why i like it so much cos i can really relate to that. Great stuff.
I liked the feeling you're describing here...it's really relatable and it was easy imagry to grasp. that and you used some good sensory detail. This poem really portrays trust to me ...like you have no fear of falling with this person which is in itself a incredible feeling. great write! keep writing. peace ~silent
I like the way you feel your body leaving the Earth and you don't watch it. You completely trust the person you're with and you trust them to carry you away. I also like the way you consider yourself with the stars when you are with them and when that person is gone you are nothing but ashes. When I read this I imagined you kissing and this is describing what you were feeling at the time.
i agree with each and every good member of elite skills who has agreed with you. I enjoyed reading it and like others said, it was worth reading and unique. I look forward to reading more of your poems. I hope that you will take time out and comment on my poem like I did to you.
Hell yeah! I [censored]in' love this poem. it kinda reminds of the way J.R. Hayes of Pig Destroyer writes. I really like this piece, I don't know why but I find this to be one of the most unique writes on the site.