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    dots Submission Name: The Dark Horse Statedots
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    Author: TechnoticQ
    ASL Info:    25/M/Royal Oak, MI
    Elite Ratio:    3.86 - 359/307/43
    Words: 372
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 303
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    Description:
       The Dark Horse is my own term for the feeling you get when you're way blown out and are fighting the feeling of passing out. I wrote this piece some time ago while fighting with that feeling.


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    dotsThe Dark Horse Statedots
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    The buzz is on...

    Liquid fire on my brain
    Too many chemicals in my main vein
    Living a life and world of lies
    Spermicide running down my thighs
    Two naked women, both in comas
    Giving off a mixture of post-coital aromas

    I vaguely remember...

    3 bottles drained to make my sin
    2 whiskey, 1 vicadin
    5 big roaches in my ashtray
    5 more small ones thrown away
    The dark horse state trying hard to find me
    Licking on that stamp of LSD

    I wonder...

    How did I get in this situation
    Without feeling the least bit of degradation
    Or even care about who I'm becoming
    From the effects of freebasing and constant mind
    numbing
    I'm not even sure if I'm trying to get high
    Or trying as hard as I can to just die

    But yet...

    I suppose I probably can't
    After all, I'm alive enough to write this rant
    The cocktails weren't quite explosive enough
    The acid wasn't quite corrosive enough
    The creeper wasn't very creepy
    And those girls didn't taste very STD-ee

    And in the end...

    It's been raining and and pouring
    With events that aren't fun but at least they aren't
    boring
    And friends, you as well will brood
    When you give out your love, and get back
    solitude
    And friends, that's the name of the game of life
    when
    You lose it all, gain it, and lose it again.




    Submitted on 2005-12-25 05:31:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like how the flow is broken, because it fits with the words. You are very expressive on the feel of the poem. It caused the imagery to be astounding. Good write. Ciao.
    | Posted on 2006-01-10 00:00:00 | by BrokenAngel | [ Reply to This ]
      very very expressive...at times the rythm was ruptured a bit, but other than that very very interesting read. It's not only a poem but a story in itself. I admire your skills at narration.
    | Posted on 2005-12-25 00:00:00 | by ParanoidParadox | [ Reply to This ]


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