Description: hey guys i am reposting this so if you hav read it before that is why, that may be not allowed and if not i am sorry, i just havent been writing a whole lot latley and decided to try and improve some things from the past... this one is kind of long and im wondering if that takes away from it im considering trying to cut it down ...advice would be greatly appriciated
Goodbye to blue eyes -------------------------------------------
Broken promises give way to tears
Tears sting in crimson cuts across pale skin
And just when blue eyes light up, she smiles
It always ends in cuts and tears again
The world gets better just to fall apart
And the blue eyed girl cant take it any more
The cuts and tears cant mend her broken heart
Idol Thoughts become memories of times before
The mood lights his eyes the deepest shades of brown
In the darkness where he swore hed never leave
But now hes gone and scarlet tears keep fallin
Amidst the unresolved pain he cant convieve
The fake smiles seem to keep her friends from asking
She walks the halls just livin in the lie
Hes so far gone he cant see past her acting
The drugs that took him away cloud bloodshot eyes
She just wants to shut out all this pain
She just wants someone to give her one last chance
But the blue eyed girl still stands out in the rain
Washing her tears away too alone to dance
Screamin "curse the miles that took away my life
Why live when i gotta watch him die this way
The drugs and miles they kill the guy i love
If he has to leave i dont think i want to stay"
So bid goodbye to blue eyes as they fade
Tommorrow sheads new light on lies once told
No more lies or fake smiles or scarlet tears
Now the true story of her love unfolds
"One last phonecall just to hear your voice
I hope you understand this is for you
You tell me to move on but i just cant
I just dont know what else i can do
You say bye just like all the times before
The phone clicks, i know you cant hear the end"
A tear falls from bright blue eyes and hits the floor
"I love ya babe but my life i just cant mend"
Blue eyes closed forever that night
AS the snow poured down outside beneath full moon
And when he got the phonecall that next morning
He cried at the thought of looseing her so soon
The funeral was a picture of perfection
Held in the darkness in the pouring snow
And to add to the irony of the situation
They met on this date just one year ago
Everything was just the way shed wanted
just her family and her closest friends
The sky its deepest blue full moon dawning
He could have swore she smiled back up at him
Blue eyes were closed but how he longed to see him
He realized that he hadnt in so long
Hed never forget the last the last time she was crying
Weeks ago while he wispered just stay strong
It came his time now to pass before her
A single tear fell down and hit her face
But this time she wouldnt be there as his comfort
No matter how much they both wanted one last embrace
Clad in tiered jeans and a red hoodie
Her hair that always fell into her face
He saw a girl hed held so many times
A girl whos memorie couldnt be erased
A silver cross clasped tightly in one hand
They say she held it on the night she died
He gave it to her a few days after they met
They never new then all the tears theyd cry
As he passed he had a withered rose in hand
And laid it gently there across her chest
Colliding now with all these shattered memories
Misunderstood and mocked by all the rest
When all were gone he watched her fall
Through the snow into the frozen ground
One more i love you and shed still be here with him
Now its just too late to turn around
He whispered i love you to his blue eyed girl
Hopeing there was some way she could hear
Thinkin' how hed promised her forever
No one knew forever was a year
omg!i loved it, i didnt run on or anything, every detail helped the story. i cried, but thats ok. this is most definatly going on my favorites list. itwas so sad and perfect... ok im done now.
I love this a lot! It seemed a lot at first but I actually read the whole thing. Once you start reading, it really pulls you in. I used to like this guy when I was a freshman and he was really into drugs and a lot of crap. It's sad to watch someone just fade away and you know you'd never have the chance. This is really sad and you captured everything perfectly. Lovely poem. :::Steph:::
That is amazing. I love it! I cant relate, but I cried. Im fascinated. The descriptions and expression, and even every little detail are just perfect. The whole "year" thing made it even sadder (hmm...is that a word? oh well. it is now). It's definitely the best thing I've read in a very long time. I dont even know what to say to explain how much I love it. You are awesome and full of talent. VERY beautifully done. Great Job
Wow this was intense and an amazing write! I was crying almost the whole way through which isn't like me...it started at the drug part because a guy I'm into (but all I"m going to say is he's the one guy I can't have) is really into drugs and I hate seeing him like that...but this was so sad and yet so many die in similair ways...you painted a very real picture within each word and I must say this is the best thing I've read in a very long while. this is definatly a favorite. keep writing...this write had A LOT of talent. . peace. ~silent
Submission Name: Goodbye to blue eyes
VERY beautifully done. Great Job 
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