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Author: dude90998
ASL Info:    15/m/La
Elite Ratio:    4.43 - 43 /36 /8
Words: 14
Class/Type: Haiku /Comedy
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The small blades of grass
Being stepped on everyday
When will they strike back

Submitted on 2005-12-25 19:35:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Heheh - I think you captured the essence of a comedy hiku right here. Hiku are primarily about nature, and you have that aspect. As well, the short efficient deliverance of the comedy of it allows the mind to conjure up all sorts of hilarious images, whereas a longer piece might ruin the effect. All in all, wonderful work :)
| Posted on 2006-03-28 00:00:00 | by Starless Knight | [ Reply to This ]
  Nice. This is pretty sweet. What if the grass just, started absorbing abnormal amounts of sunlight and converting it into energy, and their photosynthesis rates went insane and the plantlife on earth took over completely... I heard in a fairy tale once there was a swamp somewhere where the foliage never quit growing, and the swamp keeps getting bigger and bigger... fun to read about, doubt it's truths. Peace. -rue
| Posted on 2006-01-07 00:00:00 | by Rue | [ Reply to This ]
  this made me think of stephen kings the dark tower in that book somewhere there was a really cool description of the universe and the idea that if we could find the farthest reaches of it and perhaps find a wall of some sort and brek through it how surprised and humbled we might be to find our much touted explorers peering out of a single blade of grass. this might be totally not what you had in mind by your work but i thought i would share it with you

I liked it for its sinister simplicity
| Posted on 2005-12-26 00:00:00 | by hauntedrose | [ Reply to This ]
  omg I loved this. It was so precise and simple and sweet it just kind of made you smile.

When will they strike back? and for that matter what about the ants and flowers we trod on everyday?

a very enjoable Haiku

| Posted on 2005-12-25 00:00:00 | by MystMaker | [ Reply to This ]

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