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    dots Submission Name: A Beautiful Lifedots
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    Author: _Dancing_Alone_
    ASL Info:    14/f/and...MARS.
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 91/96/36
    Words: 286
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Venting
    Total Views: 278
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1840



    Description:
       my journal kind-of says something about it but..........
    this is basically about missing out on the good & the bad of this beautiful life.....
    i
    my friend is a little suicidal.....(i guess alot more than me) so,
    im also asking for someone to relate to...if they are also having trouble about someone who left them.


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    dotsA Beautiful Lifedots
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    ~A Beautiful Life~

    Forgetting you is hard to do/i wonder if you feel it too but/
    Forgetting me is up to you.Maybe it's me & what if im wrong?
    /is it better to dance together or stand alone without a song?

    /but i know who loves you until death does its part./and i know who wants you to love back with all of your heart/-do you care?
    /live this beautiful life with no-one else by your side,will you ever realize
    /how people around you feel inside....

    //Chorus:Why'd you have to go?/you left with things unknown/how you never know what you have till' its stolen from you./And this is life!/with beautiful sights./with love sound and music that fills the soul,heart & mind/it comes with the bad.tragic & sad.but its better to take it then to give up too fast.enjoy everything while it lasts/in this,beautiful life//

    so i know you might not listen/but would you at least look at me?
    /see how i take what life gives me,even if it leaves my wrists bleeding.
    /and if you stick around/you'd feel that you've found/so much more than you've imagined/
    so much more you ever thought of.

    /what about the bad/will you give in & be thrown out?/swallow down the pain & forget it even was there/think about the ups & the highs/don't fall apart to a goodbye.

    ~Chorus~

    ~Bridge:
    This is a beautiful life/to anyone who feels the same inside/
    a non-perfect world for all of god's soul(s)

    This is a beautiful life/just look around,you'll find/
    the imperfect smiles,from everyone/
    happy or sad/look at what you could've had/
    if you stayed & lived your own beautiful life.




    Submitted on 2005-12-25 21:32:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I found the contents to be quite inspirational, in the way of writing, seeing as I haven't written for a while, and I loved the title and how it was incorporated into the song. For me, the highlight was the chorus. As the centre point of the song, it has to be catchy, good and a lot of other things. Well yours did that and much much more.

    The one thing I found difficult about this was the structure, the // and () and other keyboard functions got in the way of the lyrics for me, and I sorta had to force myself to keep reading through them, and now I'm glad I did, although I can't really relate to the message here.

    Generally, a solid write.
    -James
    | Posted on 2005-12-27 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an incredible incredible write
    Any performer would be honered to record this song
    This is a beautiful ode to life
    I really enjoyed reading this
    I would suggest you put a copyright logo with your name under this
    Yes it is that good
    God Bless
    Your Friend
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-12-26 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]



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