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    dots Submission Name: christmas daydots
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    Author: Kay
    ASL Info:    15/f/
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 216/197/68
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Rant/
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       yeah................don't really care about anything right now...cus uhm....yeah.so this is how my day went


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    dotschristmas daydots
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    waking up
    to go downstairs & open your presents
    so much hugs and love
    and you later brag ur friends

    as your opening your last present
    the liveing room changes into your bedroom
    you find your self once again in your bed
    and realize that was just a dream
    you walk downstairs expecting to see a tree
    with presents under
    and then you remember.....
    that there will be no christmas this year
    you get a tear
    and go back under your covers

    cus this year there was not enough money
    you asked your parents
    but they just say "too much bills
    so sorry huney..no presents"

    you make your own imagination
    and spend your whole day with misconception

    and when you go back to school
    you try to hide b4 u make ur self a fool
    cus all you hear is "what'choo-get-4-christmas"
    and then you hear the "bragging" begin
    cus this christmas
    there was no need for a tree




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      you know what. screw american christmas. its not worth it. its not ment to be what it has turned into. i am very sorry. that happened. chin up. i have had welfare christmass, and christmass where we would have to leave all behind. i remeber the kids at school and what it felt like. honey i am so sorry it happened to you. i understand.
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    | Posted on 2005-12-27 00:00:00 | by snufthepunk28 | [ Reply to This ]
      Dude, this makes me sad, you have that "ever so sweet" dream of happiness, and then you wake up, it's like, god, why did I even wake up, you go downstairs, and...I don't know this has to be the most mood altering poem that I have ever heard, I've never felt this sad after reading a poem, you really got to me, this is going to my favs list...

    Hey, keep your chin up... it'll get better
    | Posted on 2005-12-26 00:00:00 | by vanhokinshtyl | [ Reply to This ]


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