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    dots Submission Name: Its Colddots

    Author: Tarek Refaat
    ASL Info:    24/m/Egypt
    Elite Ratio:    2.66 - 370/508/212
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsIts Colddots

    Its Cold

    Walking down the streets
    Feeling so cold today
    But I guess it wasnít just the weather anyway
    Was it the coldness inside of me?
    That resides within me

    The cold shiver running through ever limb
    Feeling frozen
    Feeling numb
    Feeling a silence
    I cannot overcome

    My hand shivers as I write
    My mind bleeding from its fright
    Heart struggling to stay alive
    Everything seems to be dieing inside

    So slowly
    And so painfully
    Everything overwhelms me
    So suddenly

    Awaiting the warmth of the sun
    Its rays to beam life through me
    To bring safety to my soul
    To stop my bleeding mind

    When or how?
    I really donít know
    Somehow I gave up
    But I didnít give up

    But Iíll just write
    Even with shaking hands
    At least for now
    Itís all I have

    To write and say
    How I feel to day
    How I will feel tomorrow
    And how it felt yesterday

    Although all the pain
    Grateful , I am
    For simply being
    What I am

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      Sounds like an anxiety attack. or a bout of depression. I have felt this way before. I hate it but it does lead to some writing that gives me satisfaction. This was well expressed and rang true in my spitit. Jeri
    | Posted on 2005-12-26 00:00:00 | by Jerilynn | [ Reply to This ]
      I actually really enjoyed this poem. It is going on my favorites. Kudos to you! Keep writing I would actually love to read more poems from you.
    | Posted on 2005-12-26 00:00:00 | by Fadeintoreality | [ Reply to This ]
      this is great! how could no one comment on this? anyway! im so glad that ur glad just being urself! more ppl need to do that including me! goodjoB!
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-12-26 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]

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