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    dots Submission Name: milodots
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    Author: hauntedrose
    ASL Info:    30
    Elite Ratio:    4.67 - 54/38/8
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1598
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    Description:
       Okay so this is an emotional one for me. I battle with these questions of how much to take from a lover before it is unhealthy all the while knowing for myself that god has unconditional love for me. so this poem was written while trying to leave a very abusive relationship with a person I still love and admire and respect a great deal. Unfortunately the most often experienced emotion I felt around him for years was fear.
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    Face carved in anger or was it disgust
    doesnt matter neither one inspires trust
    feeling born in love wither to lust

    such a handsome face with tired eyes
    false bright smile a mask that hides lies
    there is no truth in the devils eyes

    so sorry to see you go away
    love once so strong succumbs to decay
    but, even the sunset destroys the day

    no matter what we're going going through
    wont change any of my love for you
    what is real is forever is eternally true

    and this is the love that i give to you




    Submitted on 2005-12-26 06:10:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This one I really like
    This write speaks real truth
    When a relationship falls away there will always be a feeling even if it is held deep in the subconcious of true healtfelt love for that person
    I do like the style you wrote this in of one continous rhyme
    Very Well Done
    I look forward to reading more of your writes
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-04-24 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem is dense and is good. this is an interesting poem. i like the line ' even the sunset destroys the day'. Love is a fickle thing I guess. Its to keep it.
    | Posted on 2005-12-26 00:00:00 | by Fraser | [ Reply to This ]
      Hauntedrose what more can I say, who've made those hidden tears come my way,
    the poem was so emotionaly built,
    filled with passion, love, and guilt,
    'Tis was a write so very well
    a poem not even for millions should sell...

    keep up the fantastic work!
    -Sharon
    | Posted on 2005-12-26 00:00:00 | by SavedDragon | [ Reply to This ]
      You are right that true love does not wither just because the one loved does not feel the same, or maybe is unworthy. this shows that just because one person can allow their finner emotions to decay into lower feelings, the one remains true and pure. I don't agree that sunset destroys the day though. It commpletes it. HMMMMM, you have got me thinking again. thanks, Jeri
    | Posted on 2005-12-26 00:00:00 | by Jerilynn | [ Reply to This ]
      powerful yet very simple .. how everyone expresses love in their own manner , its quite impressive how to just watch how a loving heart writers for its lover.. great job keep going :)
    | Posted on 2005-12-26 00:00:00 | by Tarek Refaat | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this. dont get me wrong. but it could have ben better! just elaborate a tid bit more! if u do that then it will be perfect! ya love and heartbreak is a hard thing to go through! trust me! ive been there!good job!
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-12-26 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]


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