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    dots Submission Name: Wardots
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    Author: SavedDragon
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 303/258/85
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWardots
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    Envy, greed, hunger for power
    Infiltrate, take lives, enemies devour

    Invade, investigate another land
    One man down, a helping hand

    Battle grounds, hear bombs explode
    Land mines, lost limbs, bag of bones

    Pride, honor, death by will
    One goal, murder, death and kill.




    Submitted on 2005-12-26 13:05:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Unlike Pink Fairy I think the flow is awesome. And the rhyme scheme is good. Uproot/truth and end/then are consonant and therefore do not destroy the rhyme scheme. Gosh some people are so illiterate! I think you just destroyed war in a few lines and stanzas and I like how you didn't write a huge poem that is too dragged about the subject. Short, sweet, and simple I like it.

    The Poet of Arson
    | Posted on 2006-01-11 00:00:00 | by Flamequill | [ Reply to This ]
      I think the flow was a bit off. Maybe it was because of the rhymming: Then and End don't rhyme, neither, truth and uproot. But besides that it was alright. I think you should do some editing. I like the subject. WAR, it's like today's main problem. So it's good that you wrote about it. I do prefer the sarcasm from your other political poem.

    PinkFairy
    | Posted on 2005-12-26 00:00:00 | by PinkFairy | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the style in this the rhyming scheme in this is good. War is an interesting subject and its just continues. It so frustrating and your poem is relatable.
    | Posted on 2005-12-26 00:00:00 | by Fraser | [ Reply to This ]


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