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    dots Submission Name: The Life of a Simple Guydots
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    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 337/364/104
    Words: 216
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 626
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    Description:
       Just something I felt like writing like everything of mine is... spontaneous... so yeah hope you all enjoy it... it is like the life of a simple guy...


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    dotsThe Life of a Simple Guydots
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    He wakes up everyday,
    Gets out of bed at 6:00 AM,
    Takes a shower, gets dressed, goes to work everyday,
    Puts up with everyone putting him down and looking at it in the end,
    He is just trying to survive in this world we live in

    Forcing himself to keep at it,
    Trying to become somebody,
    But expenses keep on growing and he fights to keep from drowning,
    Fighting an uphill battle to try to maintain his family,
    Exhausted because everything is dying inside him

    He is just a simple guy
    Who everyone recognize
    Keeps struggling, and struggling to bring his dreams alive,
    Tormented by everything but looking cool and calm outside,
    Suffering deeply and neglecting it for anyone to recognize

    The day coming to an end,
    He gets home at 6:00 PM,
    Hugs his child, kiss his wife, living yesterday again,
    Everyday living masquerading his anguish and pain,
    His love for his family and to give them a better life is what he is trying to attain

    Next day comes fast,
    He gets promoted at last,
    From supervisor to manager, putting his sadness in the past,
    Finally being able to everything he owes pay back,
    Inside finally smiling because he made it to the other side of the tracks.




    Submitted on 2005-12-26 15:40:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a sweet poem you have here. It tells a tale lots of people can relate to...life and work and work and life! It feels as if that is all I do sometimes and never seem to have enough time for the things I enjoy such as spending time with family. But the bills never stop coming that is for sure and gotta do what ya gotta do to survive in this world. I like the simplicity this write has, it is nicely written and expressed. And the ending is a happy one too...yeay! Hope all is well with you! Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-12-28 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      The greatest thing about this poem is its simplicity - as the title suggests, 'The Life of a Simple Guy.' He is just an ordinary guy, and I personally agree, that possibly a larger percentage than we realize is struggling like this out there, day after day. I am especially fond of your word choice on 'struggling to bring his dreams alive,' I think it gives this piece emotion, enables the reader to relate and feel what he must be going through. This is, as I said, a simple poem yet at the same time an enjoyable read for its relation to the real world.
    | Posted on 2005-12-26 00:00:00 | by fading37embers | [ Reply to This ]


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