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    dots Submission Name: Is this for realdots
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    Author: mysterious one
    ASL Info:    19/f/in my head
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 56/56/16
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 505
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 480



    Description:
       I wrote this poem a few years ago. I cant remember if i was going through anything like this at the time, but since i'v wrote it, its come to describe a few incidents in my life. Its almost like i knew what i was going to go through.


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    dotsIs this for realdots
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    What is this feeling I feel inside,
    like a butterfly flying when you walk by,
    it takes me over from my head to my toe,
    my palms sweat my mouth goes dry and oh what a feeling this is I sigh.
    You look at me and I look at you,
    then I turn not knowing what else to do,
    when will this feeling end,
    I just have to cry,
    how long will it take you to decide,
    if this love is for real,
    or am I just waiting to be killed.




    Submitted on 2005-12-26 21:45:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I know exactly what is like to get these feelings. I can't explain the times i have wanted to say something to a girl, but never manned up to say anything, or the times i have been cheated on, or taken advantage of, again, good stuff.
    | Posted on 2007-09-22 00:00:00 | by lyonhart08 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was pretty good, its funny but I know what you mean about writing some intense emotion that you don't feel until a while after you've written about it. this was sad in a way that just most people (and yea a lot of girls would be more willing to admit to it) have felt this, walking by someone and feeling, amazingly unreal....wondefully out-of-control. but it is heartbreaking to look away and wonder what could have happened if you just held that glance one second longer....but hey, I like to think of it this way, at least you weren't the one who kept staring long after the other person has looked away, from experience that's a lot worse of a feeling to be stuck with. I would have loved to seen you expand on this one but it was beautiful as is
    take care,
    ~jess
    | Posted on 2006-08-09 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      Oooh, this is interesting. It starts off describing the incredible, wonderfully uncomfortable feeling you get when you pass someone you are really into - but then changes into something far more crushing right at the very end... I liked it. Perhaps it could have done with being a bit longer though... keep it up, Sugar xx
    | Posted on 2005-12-30 00:00:00 | by Sugar | [ Reply to This ]



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