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    dots Submission Name: Conferedots
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    Author: snufthepunk28
    ASL Info:    21/f/ak
    Elite Ratio:    4.5 - 244/178/68
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    Description:
       There has been quite a bit of life changes for me the last couple of mounths. I have decieded to take a stand and clean house.
    Love. how we miss use that word. its not all about confert and holding someones hand. its also about lotting go. even putting to sleep those which you hold dearst.
    if i am ment to teach love to the world and show them whoam love is. yet i allow love to be abused because i fear that i wont allow it to shine brightly. then what i am teaching is wrong. that is not love. "4Love is patient, love is kind. It does not envy, it does not boast, it is not proud. 5It is not rude, it is not self-seeking, it is not easily angered, it keeps no record of wrongs. 6Love does not delight in evil but rejoices with the truth. 7It always protects, always trusts, always hopes, always perseveres.

    Love never fails." 1st chor 13.
    www.biblegateway.com
    love protects, i have a lesson to still learn about protecting myself.
    love snuff


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    dotsConferedots
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    Confere how I revered you.
    My hands cradling your face whail my lips adapted the salt from your eyes.
    Benightedness of your intentions my lips drank.
    The blue acid tips disperced into my soul.
    Collapsed, I sought your eyes.
    When I found, I saw. The sight of my distruction was feeding your dissapation.
    I wept.
    Rose colord drops fell staning the ground that cradled me.
    Ephemearly you watched before you turned away.
    As the darkness fell, I was made to stand.
    The melody of melancholy became my life fource.
    Birfly after witch I found you.
    You begain to cry.
    Sweetly, I held you my beloved brother.
    Gently, I rocked you and sang the melody.
    Then I closed you eyes.




    Submitted on 2005-12-27 02:53:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is simply beautiful
    You show your devotion to the human race by reaching out to someone who needs love
    Ii teared up reading this as this is what I try to do with each and every write
    I hope this writing finds you doing well
    I was really touched by your last comments to me
    I am thankful you are here to
    I will be writing more very shortly I had to stop for a couple of days because i just arrived in NJ to visit my Mom
    God Bless
    And Lets Please Pray For Peace in 2006
    Your Friend
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-12-29 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Wholly Ravioli Felicia! I think this was probably one of the most from the heart things I have ever read. Maybe its just me, but this was comforting and made me feel like my head was on a pillow because someone there was someone there for me to help me close my eyes and caress me to sleep. Sorry if I misinterpreted the whole write, but thats just what I got out of it.

    You had a lot of spelling errors in this one, but I have been reading your stuff long enough that I can overcome that obstacle, but perhaps before you post you can paste it into a word type document and run a spell check first, ya know? Just a suggestion that would help improve your writing. But nonetheless...I really liked this and a big high five to you.


    Oh and P.S.
    Yes, that "L" word you speak of in the desc. Yeah, it gets thrown around far to often by people that dont know the true meaning of it. But then again, we all have our own interpretations of it and thats the gawd awful beauty and misery of it, eh?
    | Posted on 2005-12-27 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      loving these lines:

    My hands cradling your face whail my lips adapted the salt from your eyes.

    The melody of melancholy became my life fource.

    I found a few typos, "distruction," "staning," "birfly," "begain," and "then I closed you eyes"
    | Posted on 2005-12-27 00:00:00 | by vanhokinshtyl | [ Reply to This ]
      Good write I think, but that's me and just an oppinion. One thing I think this could need, including your description is a dictionary or spell check. I mean really bad. there are so many words mispelled plus, you could probably use something for the words that I don't think exist. anyway THNX

    - Nammy
    | Posted on 2005-12-27 00:00:00 | by Namlooc20 | [ Reply to This ]


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