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    dots Submission Name: Hybrid Rainbowdots
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    Author: Leon Kennedy
    ASL Info:    15/m/La
    Elite Ratio:    2.78 - 51/75/22
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Bytes: 510



    Description:
       saw a rainbow. thought how it brought cheer to many people. i turned it around so it causes despare instead.


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    dotsHybrid Rainbowdots
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    Take red for all your anger,
    That puts both of us in danger,
    Orange for all the shame,
    For which I am the blame,
    Yellow for all the fear,
    That’s takes away all of our cheer,
    Green for all your greed,
    Which I always feed,
    Blue for your confusion,
    Over me whom you are losing,
    Purple for my power,
    That seems to make you cower
    This is the hybrid rainbow that both of us make,
    Because of all the things we forsake…




    Submitted on 2005-12-27 13:19:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      at first...i was like what kind of a person would write this? who would want to take the joy out of the simple things in life that are yet so complicated and beautiful...but the last 2 lines broght it together. next time i see a rainbow i will be more appreciative (not that i can spell that)
    xoxoxomuchlove-ash
    | Posted on 2005-12-30 00:00:00 | by DanceADream | [ Reply to This ]
      thats ccooo i like that the rainbow is not a happy thing and that we shount think colors neccecsarly happiness

    hybrid rainbow
    thats a nice way of lookin at it
    normally when i think rainbow i think gay
    but now ill think hybrid


    Queen Darkness of the Grim Draco
    | Posted on 2005-12-28 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ]


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