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The laughter of the day

Author: Fraser
ASL Info:    26
Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 30 /55 /35
Words: 100
Class/Type: Poetry /Happy
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i just wanted to write laughter and things that make you laugh.

The laughter of the day

the laughter i hear in the day
makes my ears jump
and my mind gain feeling
theres joy in my being
as a laugh emerges
and flutters out
warming me all over
i think of a a joke told
or a pleasent gift
both give mirth to my very lips
people talk about friends
in bars or in houses
the stories told
of funny happenings
I sit hear and think of times
of good and of feelings grand
i want you to play that piano Sam
i want to hear it again and again

Submitted on 2005-12-27 19:26:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i love laughing. i liked the poem it made me smile. i think it could be better but everything could be better in the end things are what they are. i loved the second to last line.
| Posted on 2005-12-27 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
  this is verry pritty
we all have those days that all we want to do is reminis. in fact most of the time we look forward to those days. i really like your style its refreshing. this was a lovely write

its just me
| Posted on 2005-12-27 00:00:00 | by sweet sorenity | [ Reply to This ]

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