The laughter of the day

Author: Fraser ASL Info:    26 Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 30 /55 /35 Words: 100

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The laughter of the day

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the laughter i hear in the day makes my ears jump and my mind gain feeling theres joy in my being as a laugh emerges and flutters out warming me all over i think of a a joke told or a pleasent gift both give mirth to my very lips people talk about friends in bars or in houses the stories told of funny happenings I sit hear and think of times of good and of feelings grand i want you to play that piano Sam i want to hear it again and again

Submitted on 2005-12-27 19:26:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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i love laughing. i liked the poem it made me smile. i think it could be better but everything could be better in the end things are what they are. i loved the second to last line.

| Posted on 2005-12-27 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]

this is verry pritty we all have those days that all we want to do is reminis. in fact most of the time we look forward to those days. i really like your style its refreshing. this was a lovely write xoxo its just me

| Posted on 2005-12-27 00:00:00 | by sweet sorenity | [ Reply to This ]

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