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    dots Submission Name: i can feel nowdots
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    Author: namesdontmatter
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/89/29
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsi can feel nowdots
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    all the stupid things we did
    because it was cool to lie
    and even better to bleed
    please believe me when i say that im different
    i can feel now

    all the nails are coming out of the walls
    and my flag is rolling down
    because i cant look up to the crossbones
    without hating myself
    for all the things i said, and the stupid shit i did

    all my t-shirts couldnt save me now
    i wish i was honest, now i feel so lost
    i never understood how to fold the map
    lif is a temporary condition
    death is just the boring intermissiong
    ill be back to smile some more

    did you hear that i could feel now
    and i dyed my hair again
    i know you wont forget the shit i did
    but im different








    Submitted on 2005-12-27 22:10:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nicely written. I like the feelings in it, though you might want to work on capitalization and spelling. When you go in too deep it's hard to get out. Good luck on your journey.
    (if the poem's based on your life that is)
    | Posted on 2005-12-29 00:00:00 | by Azure | [ Reply to This ]


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