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    dots Submission Name: Somethin'dots
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    Author: Robbing Hood
    ASL Info:    16/m/Ark
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 26/35/10
    Words: 406
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Passion
    Total Views: 767
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       i was in the mood to get fucked up and pass out when i was writing this


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    dotsSomethin'dots
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    smoke somethin, drank somethin, take somethin/
    slang somethin, sell somethin, trap somethin/
    get tipsy till your mind is nothin/
    then deal and deal, keep that money coming/

    Robbing Hood-
    Im drunk, high, and obscene/
    chase hennessey with green/
    T.W. Adams and Chronic/
    Rum and Turtle, Im on it/
    sittin in the basement hittin my pipe/
    swallowing some alcohol of the vodka type/
    I get high before, and then drunk as i write/
    Im not an alcoholic/
    I just drink till I vomit/
    Then Ill smoke buddha with my team/
    Thats the way of life for an aberrant king/
    Yea, thats the way we ball/
    Get tipsy till we fall/
    Forceing ourselves to crawl/
    To my dealer to order myself a bag/
    Good thing thats me or else Id be weedless and sad/
    Trappin, it aint no crime/
    Its just another way for me to get mine/


    smoke somethin, drank somethin, take somethin/
    slang somethin, sell somethin, trap somethin/
    get tipsy till your mind is nothin/
    then deal and deal, keep that money coming


    smoke somethin, drank somethin, take somethin/
    slang somethin, sell somethin, trap somethin/
    get tipsy till your mind is nothin/
    then deal and deal, keep that money coming/

    maninthemirror-
    now I be walkin down the greeny plant crop
    aint got alot it just be the leaves and tops
    but I take advantage, pickin from the planted pot
    now I got an ounce, I be smokin what I got
    don't try and tell that your shit is better
    my homie is the hood deliver in any weather
    rockin hella bongs, so many pounds of the weed
    I got the green goblin, like bill gates got cheese
    role down the window in the lincoln, so the shit can air out
    take a trip by the hoes and empty out they bank account
    you might call me crazy but you gotta try the fry
    although it sorta scare me when they said that I could die
    find out why they call me sales when I get the hookup
    bitch, you try and fuck me over, I swell your lip up
    I know a ho with weed has my weed indeed
    so I take the bitches shit and get the high I need

    smoke somethin, drank somethin, take somethin/
    slang somethin, sell somethin, trap somethin/
    get tipsy till your mind is nothin/
    then deal and deal, keep that money coming




    Submitted on 2005-12-28 01:40:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was amazing-the best thing I've read today. It is tough and intelligent and I may not know a dam thang about hip hop but I know a powerful piece of writing when I read it. The only negative thing I can come up with is that you had a few typos which usually has me clicking to the next poem but even that didn't sway me. Kudos on this one.

    ~Side of Keen~
    | Posted on 2005-12-28 00:00:00 | by Side of Keen | [ Reply to This ]
      Not too good, sorry to say. Look at the following good and bad things about your poem;
    Good:
    * It was a bit funny i guess
    Bad:
    * It was not at all unique, ive heard tens of similar lyrics (or those that sound the same)
    *The flow was annoying. clearly, you wanted it to be rhyming and in most of the places you did a good job but;
    - "Yea, thats the way we ball/
    Get tipsy till we fall/
    Forceing ourselves to crawl/" you had three lines rhyme here but in most of the places you had two. And
    - If you have rhymed "king" and "team" it is clearly by force. Try to straighten that out
    * There were several spelling errors:
    - "comeing" = coming
    - "forceing" = forcing]
    * what does "weedless" mean? please tell me because I really want to know

    Peace always,
    Reply,
    John
    | Posted on 2005-12-28 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
      Boy...don't let someone that DOESN'T KNOW A DAM THANG ABOUT HIP HOP come up in here and tell you that wasn't good! SOME PEOPLE SHOULDN'T COMMENT ON SUBJECTS UNKNOWN!

    This was mad hot yo! Loved the "chorus". You had a good rythm goin on.

    You gets my props!

    *rolls eyes at abuzzbuzz92*

    *puts hands up*

    I ain't tryin to start nothan!

    *smiles innocently*

    Li
    | Posted on 2005-12-28 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]


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