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    dots Submission Name: dreamdots
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    Author: Tinasha
    ASL Info:    20/Female/Oklahoma City
    Elite Ratio:    3.96 - 100/142/41
    Words: 242
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       i have prophetic dreams....sometimes i don't want them, but i get them anyway, of course. other times i don't remember when i wake up what the dream was about, but patience alway's whispers in my ear...


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    a dream to be dreamed
    deserving
    non-appreciative of the patient dream
         the humble dream

    the all-knowing
    yet non-boasting dream
    concealed until its moment of calling
              moment of silence
    so that it might voice its purpose
    for me
    revealing the purpose
    in me
    no
    not the “i've got to change my sheets in the morning” dream
    no
    not the “i know i replaced these batteries last week” dream
    no
    not the “i just remembered i’m all alone in my new bed” dream
    but the dream that breathes life into my very thoughts
    that sees my life’s importance
    that deserves all recognition
    but oh,
    the humble dream
    that rocks me to sleep
    and gives all the credit to the counted sheep
    for that’s all memory allowed at daylight
    that’s all i saw when i closed my eyes
    as the suns beams forced its glow through my lids
    now frustrated, i began to get angry
    as i struggled to remember what was so quickly stripped from me
    then a whisper blew its sus & spus and lu lu lu
    lullabies
    as it soothingly calmed me
    like the patient dream rocked me
    and memory lane took my hand and led me
    to the arms of my dream dreamt
    my purpose revived as if i never slept
    but only dreamed
                   and i remember




    Submitted on 2005-12-28 04:45:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really liked this. Like a story told whispering it to us. As if your dreams speak to you and almost tell storys of truth of your existance and purpose in life. Like you said you have prophetic dreams. Unfortunately I dont remember the last time I have had a dream. The way my mind works, I think all day. Name something you would see anytime during the day and I'll think about it in some way shape or form. I guess I dream while im awake. oh well. It was a nice poem. I wrote one poem called "first kiss" it's not a true story its a dream I had. you might like it.
    | Posted on 2005-12-30 00:00:00 | by musclebound350 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was beautifully done. You wrote about these dreams in such a captivating way.
    The form really added to the effect of it. It felt like a whisper.

    I am not sure that I would want dreams such as yours, but you are doing a great job of taking what is given to you.

    Dreams are such a delicate thing & really described them well.
    Yours give you knowledge. Purpose.
    They hold something that no one else knows- truly a very special gift.
    take care
    ~jennifer
    | Posted on 2005-12-28 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]


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