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    dots Submission Name: I Saw Daddy Kissin Santa Clausdots
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    Author: Mud
    ASL Info:    18/f/India
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 55/98/57
    Words: 244
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1467
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1494



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       This is the result of extreme boredom. nothing more i can say! i really hope you like it :D and i can totally understand if you don't, even... lol...



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    dotsI Saw Daddy Kissin Santa Clausdots
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    I was laying out the cookies,
    I heard a big, loud “Smack”
    Peering past the Christmas tree,
    I saw my daddy’s back!

    I saw a big red jolly man,
    His pink cheeks all aglow,
    And then I realized that they
    Were ‘neath the mistletoe!

    I know times are a-changing
    But daddy loves my mom…
    Then what was daddy doing with
    This fat man in a thong?

    I ran to mommy’s room,
    And found her in her pantyhose…
    And in the corner by the desk,
    A deer with a red nose!

    “Hopefully she’s feeding him,
    But why’s he watch her change?”
    I screamed aloud and ran away,
    I did feel quite deranged…

    “It must be a bad dream,”
    Said I, quite crazy as I was…
    I’d seen ma with a reindeer,
    And dad with Santa Claus!

    I ran out to the driveway
    And shoveled out the snow
    I planned to run away from there
    As fast as I could go

    And soon enough I’d reached a place
    Quite desolate and forlorn
    And in a cave, I spied a face
    Twas green and woebegone

    Twas then I had my biggest crush,
    The biggest of them all!
    The cause was maybe that his heart
    was two sizes too small..

    I thought that I was dreaming
    I needed a good pinch…
    Sure enough, I exclaimed out loud
    “I’m in love with the Grinch!”




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      Yeah i liked it too, it was really funny, it made me happy and took problems away. Really good work.
    -Lilyan-
    | Posted on 2008-06-25 00:00:00 | by Lilyan | [ Reply to This ]
      This is Superb! One of the best poems I have read on eliteskills. What a unique, delightful poem this is! Great imagination and very well written. I certainly shall add this to my favourites.......GREAT WRITE!!! : )
    | Posted on 2007-04-02 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      hahaa i loved this. its so adorable and its amazing. like everything flowed amazingly even though it was hillarious. you've got talent hun.
    | Posted on 2006-12-10 00:00:00 | by DontLetGo421 | [ Reply to This ]
      LOL this was pretty fun...and all this came to be becuase u were bored?? This was pretty good lol the ending could have been almost anything but urs really filled the space well. This was a great write...hehe hardly dirty at all but the imagry makes up for it. keep writing,
    this is a fav.
    ~silent
    | Posted on 2005-12-31 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      omfg that was the funniest thing i have ever read...its enlightening bc most poems i read these days are upsetting and dark
    tht was kool!
    xoxoxomuchlove-ash
    happy ney year!
    | Posted on 2005-12-30 00:00:00 | by DanceADream | [ Reply to This ]
      ROFLMAO Very funny in that "I need my therapist now" way. And it was a nice break from working retail over the holidays and having to be forced to hear carols waaaay too many times a day ^_^ Great parody!
    | Posted on 2005-12-29 00:00:00 | by RumnMoxie | [ Reply to This ]
      Mud,

    This is truly delightful in a funny and kinky way.

    The images are clean and it pulls us through like a sleigh ride on Christmas night.

    Beautifuly done. Good job!

    Chrystine
    | Posted on 2005-12-29 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]
      lol That is too awesome. Not only is it written wonderfully, but its creative and gave me a good laugh. I like how the rhyming didnt seem forced at all. Excellent. lol Great job

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2005-12-28 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      Hahahah. (lol). I really like this. You were bored but your mind was still alive. It's a very clever piece. I like it. The rhyme was good too. It was consistent throughout.
    | Posted on 2005-12-28 00:00:00 | by lilyfleur | [ Reply to This ]
      lol, this was really cute I think you need to get bored more :P
    And there's nothing wrong with falling in love with the Grinch, don't forget his heart gets all big in the end, lol.
    The only thing was that the stanza:
    "“It must be a bad dream,”
    Said I, quite crazy as I was…
    I’d seen ma with a reindeer,
    And dad with Santa Claus!"
    Didn't really flow well, but outside of that it was really cute and absolutely adorable and totally one for the favourites.
    Keep Writing
    -Caribou-
    | Posted on 2005-12-28 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]
      funny in a twisted manner.
    insane actually.
    i do believe that dreams describe one's psyche.. so i'm kinda hoping that this was all made up.
    hehe.. good work.
    | Posted on 2005-12-28 00:00:00 | by Sanjhana | [ Reply to This ]
      Extreme boredom well spent I say, very amusing, I didn't love the last couple of stanzas I think they sounded a bit forced compared to the rest and the close proximity of the twas' upset it a little, only very minor things from me though. All in all a very enjoyable little ditty, nicely done. I have problems writing with this kind of humour, but you seems to have cracked it good job.

    Happy hols and wishing you a happy new year.
    V
    | Posted on 2005-12-28 00:00:00 | by Vastmark | [ Reply to This ]
      LOL... It was a good humoured poem, it wasn't true(was it?) LOL... Fun to read, one of the best christmas poems I ever read. You should have posted it on the 25th though... oh well all that counts is that lucky people get to read it
    good work
    John
    | Posted on 2005-12-28 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]


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