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    dots Submission Name: Birth Haiku (Bless U)dots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 12
    Class/Type: Haiku/Love
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    Bytes: 76



    Description:
       The tree comes down and the folly is fading but the season is not over for the giving season begins with us each that we should sustain "IT" through the days

    Blessed & Joyous days to ALL!
    Happy & Prosperous New Year ~*~
    Love,
    tif


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    dotsBirth Haiku (Bless U)dots
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    Birth but Beginning
    The Giving Season of Man
    A Journey of Love




    Submitted on 2005-12-28 11:55:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Really beautiful
    To me this speaks of the beauty of creation and how every new life brings renewed life to the earth
    Excellent write!!!
    Let me be a little comedic here too if you will let me
    In Lithuanian which is what I am 50 percent of on my fathers side
    To say thank you
    is
    Achu (pronounced ah-chew
    My mother is french canadien and she used to always run around saying God Bless You everytime he said that
    This really brought back funny memories
    You have an incredible talent of making one smile
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-03-07 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Again, few words, but a wealth of meaning intermingled within it. The topic deserves more than to be a haiko - lengthen it.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2005-12-29 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      not to shabby, i like "birth but beginning", but the "journey of love", doesn't seem to belong, maybe journey of life to follow the birth. i do like it.

    | Posted on 2005-12-29 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh I think this is lovely. Such a journey it is too! And you have taken us back to the beginning of giving with birth being indeed the first "gift". This haiku is very well written and expressed and the message here is a very inspirational one indeed. And this is perfect for the Christmas season! Very nice job with this one. Hope your holidays were all that you wanted and filled with happiness. Best wishes to you for the upcoming new year! Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-12-28 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Hm. It's alright. I have never liked the haiku much. I admire it because you have to fit the entire thought into three lines that only contain 17 syllables. But everything I feel, think, etc. comes it out with such complexity that it's near impossible to box it into haiku form. Anyway. Yours was lovely, had a pleasant message.

    {Kate}
    | Posted on 2005-12-28 00:00:00 | by Jester_Gesture | [ Reply to This ]


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